Can we discuss this somewhere else? Btw how's your story going. I think you had
a crew working for you.
P.S. I already heard your interpretation on my poem. Now, could I have your
opinion about the words I used on it and also, how it made you feel while
reading it. What images whent through that naughty mind of yours.
*I watch several horror movies before writing it.*
I have no idea if this is what you intended, but here is what I get from the
poem. It feels primal, more specificly like someone is getting sexual
satisfaction from some sort of hunt. The words caressing, pulsations, deep
inside, and halting inhales all seem to lead to that conclusion. Fear also
produces some of these feelings as well so I might be wrong, but that's what it
first felt like when I read it. Anyway, it's good to see your work again. It's
been a while
uhm, ok, I'll grant you some seriousness for a moment...
It sounds like your poem has something to do with bloodsuckers, vampires maybe,
and somehow describing a scene from a person losing their humanity. I'm only
guessing a little cause you used to play (or still do) that one game online that
dealt with vampires.
However, the pentagram in your poem is a very deep word, it's meanings are
plenty. I remember in math class, my professor explained about the golden ratio
found inside by slight manipulation. Also, other sources include Earth's
rotation around the sun and how Venus rotates at a 5x rate forming a pentagram
after a complete revolution in congruence with Earth.
Thus, another interpretation of your poem could be a spiritual awakening of some
sort. ^_^
I can't believe Sazriel's way closer than you. But forgeting about its meaning I
just wanted to hear how'd it made my readers feel when it was read by them.
I was thinking of it as a big sexual induendo (spelling? but who
cares.).
Though, a hunt seems a bit extreme to me. I think that this "hunt" is
a metaphorical representation of a date that went well. (If it didn't turn into
something more.)
Perhaps a kiss or something deeper took place during this date?
If I lost my touch you would have figure this on your first attempt. I never
said Sazriel found out its meaning. I just stated that he was closer to its
meaning than you where with that menstrual shit you mentioned...yuck.
**But this time you caught me, it is about vampires indeed. At the end I just
added a little dark romance.**
Is a very dark poem, specially if you read it carefully with a dark background
instrumental music.
Hey, btw you never said anything about the vocabulary I used in it. Was it
sophisticated enough for your taste?
P.S. Is JOnO that busy he can't even make a quick post here?
good poem,
i first thought that it was about a higheer being, not human, but then you said
things about pulsations and all that. then it turned to sex reference. that s my
opinion. hope it helps.
darn,someone beat me to the punch of getting the
meaning of the poem and what it was about T-T.Doubt I would have gotten it right
anyway,not with way I've been feeling lately.Heh,i actually thought you wer
talking about a spider there for a sec,sex barely crossed my mind at
first.Anyway,it a beautiful poem,very perplexing if you don't read the words
closely enough.
I draw my readers close, is a reflection of how i am in real life. I like the
attention the glory...how vain I am ^^ But I like people to see close to my
"skin" in this case writting.
well,that's a good thing then,isn't it?I wish I were
more creative with my poems...I kind of stink at them XP.Anyway,I'll be waiting
for your next poem to come out .
Arising strings of splenetic laces
revolve around them gardens
before sun rises.
It hunts to see them
...turn around
leaving its poised expression
caressing sensitive pulsations.
A delusion awakes
creeping over vexing hands
wielding them decisively
deep inside open wounds.
Rely halting inhales
on my soul.
Clone pentagram omens
engraved across your inner cores.
That is a good poem^^I love it will you be my friend?
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Please?
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Please?
YOu like it? What do you think it's about?
It's about your time of the month!
Ohh, and this site is being super slow ^_^
*no comments*
doesn't deserve one-------->jasaiyajin
hey i was being serious... *ahem*
If I make you laugh, can you tell me wtf your poem is about...?
Here I go... lol... j0n0, shhh... don't spoil the jokes...
1. If I washed my cock good enough, would you suck it?
2. If you were on a bus full of lesbians, would you get off?
*eerie feeling approacheth*
That is if you're ever serious....*coughs*
1. It depends.
2. It depends
hey, just answer my questions... ^_^
why do you have to beat around the bush?
*unless shaven*
Can we discuss this somewhere else? Btw how's your story going. I think you had a crew working for you.
P.S. I already heard your interpretation on my poem. Now, could I have your opinion about the words I used on it and also, how it made you feel while reading it. What images whent through that naughty mind of yours.
*I watch several horror movies before writing it.*
I have no idea if this is what you intended, but here is what I get from the poem. It feels primal, more specificly like someone is getting sexual satisfaction from some sort of hunt. The words caressing, pulsations, deep inside, and halting inhales all seem to lead to that conclusion. Fear also produces some of these feelings as well so I might be wrong, but that's what it first felt like when I read it. Anyway, it's good to see your work again. It's been a while
uhm, ok, I'll grant you some seriousness for a moment...
It sounds like your poem has something to do with bloodsuckers, vampires maybe, and somehow describing a scene from a person losing their humanity. I'm only guessing a little cause you used to play (or still do) that one game online that dealt with vampires.
However, the pentagram in your poem is a very deep word, it's meanings are plenty. I remember in math class, my professor explained about the golden ratio found inside by slight manipulation. Also, other sources include Earth's rotation around the sun and how Venus rotates at a 5x rate forming a pentagram after a complete revolution in congruence with Earth.
Thus, another interpretation of your poem could be a spiritual awakening of some sort. ^_^
I can't believe Sazriel's way closer than you. But forgeting about its meaning I just wanted to hear how'd it made my readers feel when it was read by them.
my feelings, confusion, I said "HUH, WTF!" to myself...
The reason Sazriel is closer is cause you lost your touch in writing poetry. ^_^
Nice job! its really good!
I was thinking of it as a big sexual induendo (spelling? but who cares.).
Though, a hunt seems a bit extreme to me. I think that this "hunt" is a metaphorical representation of a date that went well. (If it didn't turn into something more.)
Perhaps a kiss or something deeper took place during this date?
OUCH!?! I don't know which of us should feel more insulted...
Me Sazriel, me >.>
If I lost my touch you would have figure this on your first attempt. I never said Sazriel found out its meaning. I just stated that he was closer to its meaning than you where with that menstrual shit you mentioned...yuck.
**But this time you caught me, it is about vampires indeed. At the end I just added a little dark romance.**
Is a very dark poem, specially if you read it carefully with a dark background instrumental music.
Hey, btw you never said anything about the vocabulary I used in it. Was it sophisticated enough for your taste?
P.S. Is JOnO that busy he can't even make a quick post here?
lol, insults are the road toward humility, take them lightly ^_^
most of the vocab was good, except parts that didn't seem to flow well... like ...
"Rely halting inhales" - I was like WTF r u talking about...
J0n0's busy w/ college, he doesn't visit the site as often cause of his GF ^_^
I'll be gone pretty soon too for a while, going to move to a new state soon and study real estate; Insurance is evil... ;p
good poem,
i first thought that it was about a higheer being, not human, but then you said things about pulsations and all that. then it turned to sex reference. that s my opinion. hope it helps.
darn,someone beat me to the punch of getting the meaning of the poem and what it was about T-T.Doubt I would have gotten it right anyway,not with way I've been feeling lately.Heh,i actually thought you wer talking about a spider there for a sec,sex barely crossed my mind at first.Anyway,it a beautiful poem,very perplexing if you don't read the words closely enough.
I draw my readers close, is a reflection of how i am in real life. I like the attention the glory...how vain I am ^^ But I like people to see close to my "skin" in this case writting.
well,that's a good thing then,isn't it?I wish I were more creative with my poems...I kind of stink at them XP.Anyway,I'll be waiting for your next poem to come out
.