wow?! understatement...it is nice...and sad...yep you do capture emotions
effectively...very nice...
not sure what inspired that...but...umm..keep it up?
good luck, thanks for sharing!
good!very good!*claps hands*^^
it wuz getting good and when it came to "wasn't realli sure.....*i almost
thought that wuz the poem cuz i didn't want it to end
wow... astounding poem Ms. Lotus! you do know how to show the situation
clearly... I do feel sorry for the whole situation... it has happened to me too,
obviouly with certain varibles... and it is not a nice situation...
this poem is broken... much like something else inside(we know what that is)...
maybe it's too straight to the point, or im an ass...
however the msg is clear, it's over and a hole is left... for humans, we're
freakin weird... arent we.!? nee...
I think poetry is a way of expressing ourselves to others in hopes that someone
will take a DEEPER look into the meaning and decypher the code, then it looks
like more time was taken to appreciate the cover up... i dunno, it still an art
that's boundless by itself...
....hmmmm.....nice poem....sad....usually people write poems to express their
feelings, i hope it's not the same case with you....i mean, for me, when i write
a poem, the message being conveyed are my feelings....hmmm...i just hope it's
not the same case with you.....anyways.....it still is a nice poem.....
a painful memory
is all you are to me
You used to brighten my day
but now you chase the sun away
my once happy heart
now a pit of despair
whenever your name is mentioned
or you appear
no longer what we used to be
sweet and free
just two people doomed for eternity
never to speak, smile or touch
his grasp on you is too much
he is between us
now i lack your friendship and trust
wasnt really sure what to title this. there is a story behind this but i think you all can figure it out.
comment if you wish
Nice poem.
very well done I can almost feel the pain
i don't know how to explain this but it is beautiful. you capture emotions so well.
um....wow
wow?! understatement...it is nice...and sad...yep you do capture emotions effectively...very nice...
not sure what inspired that...but...umm..keep it up?
good luck, thanks for sharing!
good!very good!*claps hands*^^
it wuz getting good and when it came to "wasn't realli sure.....*i almost thought that wuz the poem cuz i didn't want it to end
Sounds very lonely and emotional....
Nice poem although I'm kinda confused what the theme is
wow... astounding poem Ms. Lotus! you do know how to show the situation clearly... I do feel sorry for the whole situation... it has happened to me too, obviouly with certain varibles... and it is not a nice situation...
this poem is broken... much like something else inside(we know what that is)... maybe it's too straight to the point, or im an ass...
however the msg is clear, it's over and a hole is left... for humans, we're freakin weird... arent we.!? nee...
I think poetry is a way of expressing ourselves to others in hopes that someone will take a DEEPER look into the meaning and decypher the code, then it looks like more time was taken to appreciate the cover up... i dunno, it still an art that's boundless by itself...
tc bik..
Nicely written.
Sure is a sad poem.Hope the pain stops and you begin to write happy poems.
Very nice emotional poem 10
this is a nice poem...
I Hope that you are happy in your life and this is not your real feeling.
Kiss you sweetly...
Frenchy C.
....hmmmm.....nice poem....sad....usually people write poems to express their feelings, i hope it's not the same case with you....i mean, for me, when i write a poem, the message being conveyed are my feelings....hmmm...i just hope it's not the same case with you.....anyways.....it still is a nice poem.....
ouch~are you ok?cause that is 1 sad poem...but its a good though...