Yes I know...
I'm on a poem writing streak....
Anyways I wrote this poem cuz it seems many people are depressed when it rains
(although I'm rather happy when it does...)
SO enjoy and like it or not... I like it ^^
And don't criticize me for writing depressing poems !
On that day when the thick drop of water drenched my body
That day when the black ball of cloud overwhelmed the sky
My tears were hidden among the raindrops...
My sorrow and sadness was burried under the wet mud
Why was I crying?
Because you died...
You died infront of my blood dyed eyes...
I watch you lie on the ground without a pulse
Without a soul and without a smile...
O, how i wish to follow you
I fear to walk the dark path infront of me without you... alone
Still the rain falls but now you see my tears
My blood tears..
In the rain where people are gloom
Where people are discouraged
I lie with you silently waiting for you to awake.
Wow, vat 0_0 This is so..."emo" Great job on
it, though. I read this with an image in mind---so I'd say you're a good
"word painter" ^-^ You wanna know what I saw? I imagined a sad boy
staring at a lifeless body on the ground as rain poured down his short, black
hair and onto his loved one. I imagined the sky to be a dark gray, with small
patches of light gray here and there from lightning. Haha...maybe I saw too much
in this? The bloody tears part got me thinking of him crying red colored tears that
mixed with the rain that fell down his face.
That was sad but entertaining. Keep up the good work! ^-^
well from a poet he would have said that this is not a poem but from a writer
you do have the style that could capture people hearts through their emotion and
feelings
overall i would say nice poem but do try to make it a poem by rhyming it more
It is very sad..... But it means alot.... It says more then just the happy poems
that doesn't make sense....
The rain is calming but they look like tears..... Though the rain calms
me.....
The sound of rain splashes and the feeling makes me think about sad
things....
I hope you write more poems and good luck....
Yes I know...
I'm on a poem writing streak....
Anyways I wrote this poem cuz it seems many people are depressed when it rains (although I'm rather happy when it does...)
SO enjoy and like it or not... I like it ^^
And don't criticize me for writing depressing poems !
On that day when the thick drop of water drenched my body
That day when the black ball of cloud overwhelmed the sky
My tears were hidden among the raindrops...
My sorrow and sadness was burried under the wet mud
Why was I crying?
Because you died...
You died infront of my blood dyed eyes...
I watch you lie on the ground without a pulse
Without a soul and without a smile...
O, how i wish to follow you
I fear to walk the dark path infront of me without you... alone
Still the rain falls but now you see my tears
My blood tears..
In the rain where people are gloom
Where people are discouraged
I lie with you silently waiting for you to awake.
Nice one. It's really dark and sad
. Keep up
the good work
It's pretty... sad... but it's a good poem at the same time.
lots of emotion is behind this and it is well written.. keep it up vatican i would love to read more from you
Wow, vat 0_0 This is so..."emo"
Great job on
it, though. I read this with an image in mind---so I'd say you're a good
"word painter" ^-^ You wanna know what I saw? I imagined a sad boy
staring at a lifeless body on the ground as rain poured down his short, black
hair and onto his loved one. I imagined the sky to be a dark gray, with small
patches of light gray here and there from lightning. Haha...maybe I saw too much
in this?
The bloody tears part got me thinking of him crying red colored tears that
mixed with the rain that fell down his face.
That was sad but entertaining. Keep up the good work! ^-^
well from a poet he would have said that this is not a poem but from a writer you do have the style that could capture people hearts through their emotion and feelings
overall i would say nice poem but do try to make it a poem by rhyming it more
OMG! what a bloody poem
that was dark!
Liked it Vatican-kun! I like rain thou, it doesnt make me depress. Actually, it cheers me up!
aww...this poem is kinda sad...
It is very sad..... But it means alot.... It says more then just the happy poems that doesn't make sense....
The rain is calming but they look like tears..... Though the rain calms me.....
The sound of rain splashes and the feeling makes me think about sad things....
I hope you write more poems and good luck....
It's so sad
yet so touching.
I love it.
I disagree with the rhyming, it's great like this and it's not like all poems have to rhyme.
the poem is kinda saddening and dark...i feel the rain to be sort of a nullifying thing for me... but the poem is good though
It's very nice and sad.I really love it
awww! its beautiful! i like poems like these ^___^
sorry i havent been visiting so long - been mostly at the RFLuv group >____>;;
AHA! POEM WRITING STREAK!
wish i was
on one O_O i need inspiration to write a poem for english class xDD
your good at painting pictures in another's mind with literature - keep up the great work ^___^
i love the rain too! and yes, most people i know find it sad
oh well! i
love the rain - it makes me happy
takecare and write more if you have time ^___^
yukiyo