(Sweaty). You have a real talent for writing lust filled peoms. When you write
something it is a reflection of what your feeling at the time. You have a
passionat soul. And a deep longing for a desire filled monent like the ones
portrayed in your peoms. I can feel it. Your good keep it up. I'm more then
impressed. A+
OMG....*tears of joy*......WOW......im feeling the vibes.... im feeling
the vibes....*throws hw on the floor* forget that....this is WAY more
better....its a keeper.....LOVELY once again..lol..
very nice job....i love this one too... yo these
sex poems are turning me on...lol
Whoaaaaaa!! Lust poems fiesta ^.^ I saw another one yesterday and he got the
inspiration form you, I think. Very intense, I must say... and very sexy ^.^...
Great job, supo-chan!
Quote by dezidezOMG....*tears of
joy*......WOW......im feeling the vibes.... im
feeling the vibes....*throws hw on the floor* forget that....this is
WAY more better....its a keeper.....LOVELY once again..lol..
very nice job....i love this one too... yo these
sex poems are
turning me on...lol
loll you have a talent for these sort of poems it seems hah. yet another
passionate poem. keep it up
Hmm you have to watch your meter a little. It tends to break up a bit on this
one.There are many lines that contain two lines and that's where the meter goes
haywire. Also, because you are embarking on a linguistics exercise with peotry,
it means you have to pay close attention to things like spelling.
Usage of the word "too" is something you need to understand.
In the last line, I think that "are" is better usage than "have
been" otherwise you are changing from present tense to past tense and
that's jarring for the person reading it (and often they wont know why). It will
also help the meter.
Also it's important that you pick out unusual things from the act. Something
that only an artist can see and describe. It shouldn't be described as football
over and over.
Finally, if this is from your imagination you should really hold off talking
about something that has yet to arrive and mature (attitudes etc). If it's not
from your imagination then you are putting yourself and your partner in grave
danger of the law.
You kiss my lips.
My legs spread wide.
You feel im wet,you hear me sigh.
You play around and make me week.
So many orgasims to many to speek.
My breath goes fast.
My breasts wiggle.
The virgins passed.
Your in the middle.
Im screaming now.
You go in harder.
Our bodys hot ,we go farther.
It feels to good i can not stop.
I need some more its not enough.
You take me 1,2,3 times again.
Until we lay, both bodys have been spent.
............ekhem......
:d
GREAT poem.....
i love it.And you know why
i wonder, why have you started to write poems??:D
holy crap, that was the most intense one that I have ever read so far supo.
keep up
the good work
(Sweaty). You have a real talent for writing lust filled peoms. When you write something it is a reflection of what your feeling at the time. You have a passionat soul. And a deep longing for a desire filled monent like the ones portrayed in your peoms. I can feel it. Your good keep it up. I'm more then impressed. A+
i like ur "the used"poem in ur sig. its funny, and the poem, it has imagery...................................................uhm, yea
Holy s*** ! ! !
That was intense . . . so much passion . . . 
Keep it up . . .
i really am starting to like all of these poems...... instead of being seduced by a man it's a poem more More MORE (hahaha my joke)
Wow that is the most intense poem that I have read. *bow* I bow to you talent ^_^. Please continue with these poems they are amazing.
OMG....*tears of joy*......WOW......im feeling the vibes....
im feeling
the vibes....*throws hw on the floor* forget that....this is WAY more
better....its a keeper.....LOVELY once again..lol..
yo these
sex poems are turning me on...lol 
very nice job....i love this one too...
mmmmmm well all i can say is mmmmmmm i like this one mmmmmmmmmmm..
Whoaaaaaa!! Lust poems fiesta ^.^ I saw another one yesterday and he got the inspiration form you, I think. Very intense, I must say... and very sexy ^.^... Great job, supo-chan!
It might be all right if you could spell a little better.
i so totally agree wow *claps my hands in appluase*
ummm wow thats some talent u got there, good job.
(Blushing) .....Wow.
Another hot and rythmic poem. Nice work supo. This makes me like poetry like never before
loll you have a talent for these sort of poems it seems hah. yet another passionate poem. keep it up
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Poem #5
Wo Wo woow.. *blushes*.. lol.. OMG! supo.. great way of expressing urself it sounds and it rhymes very good.. excellent job
lol, this scene sounds so familiar..hmmm :]
Hmm you have to watch your meter a little. It tends to break up a bit on this one.There are many lines that contain two lines and that's where the meter goes haywire. Also, because you are embarking on a linguistics exercise with peotry, it means you have to pay close attention to things like spelling.
Usage of the word "too" is something you need to understand.
In the last line, I think that "are" is better usage than "have been" otherwise you are changing from present tense to past tense and that's jarring for the person reading it (and often they wont know why). It will also help the meter.
Also it's important that you pick out unusual things from the act. Something that only an artist can see and describe. It shouldn't be described as football over and over.
Finally, if this is from your imagination you should really hold off talking about something that has yet to arrive and mature (attitudes etc). If it's not from your imagination then you are putting yourself and your partner in grave danger of the law.
erm...this feels kinda perverted lol
not bad but the poem breaks a little here and there