Cry of An Imprisoned Ice Maiden

Far away in a distant land
Lives a maiden of unsurpassed beauty
All alone...
In a magnificent crystal palace

Skin of moonlight glow
Hair of silken snow
Eyes of ice shards, emotionless
Cold, haunting, yet enchanting...
An untouchable princess is she

Hiding from the world
Cold masks and cool demeanors
Heart encased in ice

A mistress of her own domain
Free to do as she pleases
And yet, secretly...
She yearns to be free
A gilded cage is still a cage
Trapped inside against her own will

Gnarled hands of darkness
Cruelly grasp her heart
Emptiness chains her soul
Never letting her go

A muted cry for help
Silence answers

The poison that is loneliness
Feeds greedily on her innermost desires
Drinks mercilessly from her soul
Leaving a bottomless void, unfulfilled

Free me from this nightmare of torment
Her silvery voice pleads
Who will be my salvation?

I yearn to be free, to live,
To feel...
Warmth, Joy, Fulfillment...
Love
Yes... to love and be loved in return

My cold hands reach out desperately for yours
Silently begging
Release me from the numbing darkness that binds
Bring me into the light
Safe within your warm embrace that is love

this is my first ever freeverse poem. thanks for taking your time to read it. feel free to comment. it will be most appreciated ^^

Quite the poem you have here...the concept is also understandable too because you're trying to break free from a solitude-like and inescapable world so you be free to do what you feel is right. Most college students do feel that way too, and I understand where you're coming from. I hope you seek the freedom you wholeheartedly desire.

Geez, took you long enough to post it, Jo *rolls eyes* Lol, j/k! But it did take you awhile...I'm still glad you did.

Now, for the poem: I love the line "a gilded cage is still a cage"; it's so realistic, and it brings to light the idea that, no matter how wonderful it may look, something can still be a cage.
Overall, the poem has a good theme, and I liked the way your tone started out as normal, but ended up as pleading; it was very nicely done, because it helped highlight the way the Ice Maiden was feeling. The emotion itself was evident as soon as you began to describe her; the words and imagery are great.

Very nice job, Jo; oh yeah, I'm working on a response to you gb post...sorry, school 'n' soccer are keeping me busy. I'll get to it soon, though...at least, I hope I will. Well, 'bye for now~

hey an-chan~ great poem. when i read it, it somewhat drew me into another world with it's descriptions and words. not quite sure where is this coming from but it's lovely nonetheless.

Chiao Anjeile!

I don't know what I say... That's a great poem.

That's a really good poem... I like the message.
Only at an end you seem to lost the form... I sense the ending is a bit different style from the rest.
But still a job well done.

It's a good poem Anjeile. ^^ I really like the way you used adjectives here.
Keep up the good work!! Thanks for sharing it.

I really liked your poem, Anjeile! Congratulations. It is really well-made, the verses are really interesting composed! The story told is really sad but romantic! I could even felt cold while reading!
I'd like to write poems like yours, but I'm better novel writter!
Keep posting your poems!

Well, I already told you how much I liked it when you first showed it to me and I still say it's really, really great, Jei ^^. You really seem to know how to create a sense of atmosphere. <--has to agree with cosmo that is melancholic but that's not necessarily a bad thing. Really nice job ^^