I have seen her everywhere,
The places that I go.
That sweet glowing angel,
Her dark side does not show.
She lights the room with her presence,
So darkness wont consume her within.
She does not want her true self to be known,
So she hides it with her grin.
That angel tries to lift people up,
She's dying to hear there cries.
She tries to keep her spirits pure,
So her madness wont show her lies.
Soon that angel will fall,
Her sweet love will turn to hate.
Her impurity takes and comsumes her,
And take her for their sake
deeper than the deep!
this is powerful,
it sorta describes the life of a housewife, in a problem family, who sturggles
to make the ends meet, sooner or later she loses patience and lashes out all the
things she never said to the family. and that regret and hate shall consume her
like the fire under the pits!
Quote by Devildudedeeper than the
deep!this is powerful,
it sorta describes the life of a housewife, in a problem family, who sturggles
to make the ends meet, sooner or later she loses patience and lashes out all the
things she never said to the family. and that regret and hate shall consume her
like the fire under the pits!
i say its about a women who had her trust betrayed in a bad way, and is keep up
a brave appearence. and is goin to lose it sooner or later
great poem!!! keep it up
wow another absolute very very good poem. your the best at writing poems. I love
it. really. I like the third part, It's cool. make more please. I'll be happy to
review. =)
i like this one too, very good, it's deep ... ''She does not want her true self
to be known'' that poem reach the deep inside of my soul .. keep it up. BYE
!!!
^^ sugoi xluminax-chan ^^ i loved it.. and the
name of it .. wow ^^.. great job i loved it and if i could i would fave it no
doubt about it.. like i said before keep on writting, i like the darkness you
represent in the two poems i have read
I have seen her everywhere,
The places that I go.
That sweet glowing angel,
Her dark side does not show.
She lights the room with her presence,
So darkness wont consume her within.
She does not want her true self to be known,
So she hides it with her grin.
That angel tries to lift people up,
She's dying to hear there cries.
She tries to keep her spirits pure,
So her madness wont show her lies.
Soon that angel will fall,
Her sweet love will turn to hate.
Her impurity takes and comsumes her,
And take her for their sake
- Lumina
Lumina hun seriously im lovin ur poems there sooo deep n good
me likie lolz
ne waiz keep it up hun can't wait to read more
deeper than the deep!
this is powerful,
it sorta describes the life of a housewife, in a problem family, who sturggles to make the ends meet, sooner or later she loses patience and lashes out all the things she never said to the family. and that regret and hate shall consume her like the fire under the pits!
this is truly deep, luving it to bits
i say its about a women who had her trust betrayed in a bad way, and is keep up a brave appearence. and is goin to lose it sooner or later
keep it up
great poem!!!
your poems just get deeper and deeper i love them ya got tallent babe...
;)
This poem... I like a lot...
It is as if you were trying to capture the humanity itself... we born inocent and loving... and we die mean and bitter...
I like this part:
She does not want her true self to be known,
So she hides it with her grin.
SO true!
Keep it up!
wow another absolute very very good poem. your the best at writing poems. I love it. really. I like the third part, It's cool. make more please. I'll be happy to review. =)
i really like this one. it's beautiful. btw, i like your new avatar. cool changing colors. byeeee.
it's absolutely beautiful and deep. i love it and some of the lines are true. it's really good ^.^
i like this one too, very good, it's deep ... ''She does not want her true self to be known'' that poem reach the deep inside of my soul .. keep it up. BYE !!!
Simply amazing...
I hope you continue to make more and more poems as good as this!!
Wow! Another unique poem of yours! I luv how you do your poems!! Great job!
^^ sugoi xluminax-chan ^^ i loved it.. and the name of it .. wow ^^.. great job i loved it and if i could i would fave it no doubt about it.. like i said before keep on writting, i like the darkness you represent in the two poems i have read
this poem has a very deep meaning in it so it seems...^^
very touching *thumbs up!*
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Great job!
YOu had wrote the great poem that i never read before!
sounds personal
Ever person has a light and dark side of themselves, some people just choose to expose one more than the other.
nice poem, thnx 4 sharing
Nice, they're are some lines that kind of mess up the rhythm of the poem, but very nice. I personally love the message.