My second poem everyone!Urmm...I'm embarassed again..ur..here...u.u

As I sleep,
I dream of that special place,
Where you and me could nourish in the dense sunlight.
Where golden sands,
That bury sweet stories,
Please sing one to me?
A moonlit kiss will,
Awaken me..
A sweet breeze that blows like,
A mothers comfort...

As I sleep,
I dream that your hear beside me,
Eating sweets and chocolate tea,
Feeling such a sweet sensation,
Please come my way?
A deep thought will,
Enlighten me..
You hold my hand,
And I feel astray...

As I sleep,
I wonder if you could ever leave me,
And the thought seems so odd...

Good Poem.
Very Romantic.
And sweet.
Lol.
Well, sayonarra.

-Lumina

waw thats really so sweet from u to write that.. XP like this peom too....thanx for sharin and dunt be embarassed keep it up sweety *hugs*

romantic......hmmm....*dream* very good poem !!!
Make more !!!

BorN2BurN

This is realli a sweet poem
Hope u could write more abt this kind of poem

its nice...not bad...
but mayb ur missing some vocabulary, and some words are misplaces
don't hate me, just trying to help ya
bai bai! happy ramadan!
Leo

not bad, could be better

"As I sleep,
I wonder if you could ever leave me,
And the thought seems so odd..."

The last line of the poem is wonderful. It sums things up with such innocence and caring...The poem is good, but the last line is what makes it great.

pretty dreamy poem you got there! I always like this kinda stuff anyways.