Quote by kawaiikiyomi whoaaa
death....interesting topic..its nice that you incoporated the line "ashes
to ashes dust to dust" i
always hear it whenever they are burying somone. well according to my religion(catholic chirstian) when you die, you will face
judgement and you either go to hell or heaven...i know it sounds weird but yup i
beleive it
ok now that i finished on the content, ...im so jealous >_< cuz
your construction of poems are so perfect... it has a nice flow when you read
it... you have a skill and a gift can
i just ask how long does it take you to create your poems?
im like your fan now haha
....
thanks lara for replying again ^_^ though do you really
see people get bury all the time? Well, it takes me a day or a few hours to
write a poem to answer your questions... lately though, I try to write a poem or
2 before so I would have to post up when you guys/girls reply. Thanks for you
kind comments as well...
Quote by 13mdHi there. I see you`ve been
busy again and I`m glad to read another one of your poems.
Well, it`s well structured again and the words just fit perfectly.
"Death is the cause for all that is lost" seems to be a brilliant
expression. One of the best poems I´ve
read in the last time. Be proud of your talent Dark Savior!
Ok, and have a nice weekend. C U soon
Wow! thanks man! You really gave me alot of encouragement
with that comment. Thanks!!!!!! Now that you mention that line... it does sound
pretty cool lol
Well, I try to get an idea of what to write about but no one really gave me any
So my next poem is something I thoght about awhile back but just
revise and made it new all together. Hope you guys/girls like it... It's about
time...
~ Forever and Today ~
A promise of forever
Has lost its way today
For what is next to never
Will only fade away
For what hold us together
A friendship that will always last
Will we fail to discover
That tomorrow has come too fast
As moments turn to memories
Days has pass me by
Will I recover before forever?
And remember to say good-bye
Will I find in time
In life, we all play a part
And that mankind is blind
To know what's forever in your heart...
Hello!!
I just finished reading all your poems. Certain are better than others but you
are really a good poet!! The difference between someone who can write well and a
good poet is that you can feel their emotions from what you read! It is true
that some some your poems are truely sad, but I guess it's better to write to
express your feelings than to keep everything inside! You really have a great
talent and I hope you'll continue to share your work with us! Because believe it
or not, your poems changed a little part inside me! Little things like that can
make a big difference in someone's life! See you around I hope!
Quote by RhiyaLynnHello!!
I just finished reading all your poems. Certain are better than others but you
are really a good poet!! The difference between someone who can write well and a
good poet is that you can feel their emotions from what you read! It is true
that some some your poems are truely sad, but I guess it's better to write to
express your feelings than to keep everything inside! You really have a great
talent and I hope you'll continue to share your work with us! Because believe it
or not, your poems changed a little part inside me! Little things like that can
make a big difference in someone's life! See you around I hope!
What I want to say can not express what your comment means
to me ^_^ Thank you for replying... I really happy (as stupid as it sound lol)
that my poems change alittle part inside... I hope it's a good part though but really you're so nice in your words for saying all you did. Thank
you!!!!!!
Well, works been super busy and I didn't really finished what I need to do. I'll
do it tomorrow lol Well, this is my new poem I just wrote... it's weird ( has
it's up and down)
~ Running on Empty (no more) ~
It's best you keep a distant
And denied my own existent
It's better if I just go away
Engulf by deception
Without a perception
For things has always been this way
For I never meant to hurt you
Give you hope and then desert you
It was not what I intent it to be
I will only hold you down
Put your life into the ground
If you choose to be with me
Though in the end I can't denied you,
Forever I would be beside you
For you always been so sweet
I just wanted to be honest
For you I love, so I will promise
For you make my life complete
So my heart I will surrender
To your love that's fully render
For you're all that I got
For I know what it is to burn
For what was lost has been return
For you had mend my broken heart
I'm running on empty
Though I'll be all right
Knowing I'm not on my own
I'm running on empty
All my life
But for once I'm not running alone
Hey Dark Savior, good job again. I love the "Forever and Today" poem
because (unfortunately) I know these emotions quiet well and it feels just like
you wrote it. The other one is good, too. I like the rhyme scheme but the flow
changes a bit. Nevertheless you`re able to catch a certain feeling again. Keep
on writing!
Quote by 13mdHey Dark Savior, good job
again. I love the "Forever and Today" poem because (unfortunately) I
know these emotions quiet well and it feels just like you wrote it. The other
one is good, too. I like the rhyme scheme but the flow changes a bit.
Nevertheless you`re able to catch a certain feeling again. Keep on
writing!
Hey man! Thanks again as always for being honest
about your opinion ^_^ I agree I didn't like "the other" lol as well.
Anyway, it's cool that you feel and understand what saying. So thanks
Well, I decided not to write anymore poems for now and end this chapter of life
until... I don't know... I get a better idea of what to write about. Plus it
seems like it's lossing interest anyway. So, I'll leave with how I feel like in
the end of it all (my life) becaue this is the out come my life would be in the
end... Thanks everyone for always replying and for the kind comments you
guys/girls gave.
~ My own ~
On my own
Without a choice
Bitter tone
Within my voice
Like the torment
In my soul
Left me silent
As I grow old
Drench my self
Within the rain
Ease the heart
Not the pain
Dim my view
Blur my vision
Turn into
This condition
As the person
Before you now
Much have worsen
As I allow
Need not bless
Or love me less
I am better on my own
Gave my best
So here I rest
Face my death all alone...
Hey man, a masterpiece of work. I guess it`s the right poem to end this chapter
of your life:-)).
Nevertheless I`m sorry you stop writing for a while cause
I´m gonna miss your poems. But it`s ok, life is full of
experiences to write about and I´m curious what your next
poem will be about. C U soon
Hey man, nice poems you have here . . . but i think that last one it takes you a
little down . . . i hope you don't mean that " . . . So here I rest
Face my death . . . " . . . really i hope you don't mean that . . . cause
you say above that your poems is getting out of you life . . .
Quote by 13mdHey man, a masterpiece of work.
I guess it`s the right poem to end this chapter of your life:-)).
Nevertheless I`m sorry you stop writing for a while cause
I´m gonna miss your poems. But it`s ok,
life is full of experiences to write about and
I´m curious what your next poem will be
about. C U soon
thanks again, again and again for always
replying. I decided to just write 1 poem a week or 2 from now on depending who's
or if anyone replys
Quote by ZetmanHey man, nice poems you
have here . . . but i think that last one it takes you a little down . . . i
hope you don't mean that " . . . So here I rest
Face my death . . . " . . . really i hope you don't mean that . . . cause
you say above that your poems is getting out of you life . . .
Don't get the wrong idea man I was just trying to say that I will die alone... meaning without anyone that
would love me. But thanks for replying to my poems
I know I said I'll stop writing for a bit but I thought I post this up since
it's fresh in my head. I was depress when I wrote this... It's not like my other
poem in a way and I use alot of swears...
~ No happy ending ~
Between the blade
And the flesh
Between the blood
And the mess
Within the thoughts
In my head
And the fainting
Taste of lead
Fucking depress
Is not the word...
With all this stress
That has occurred
So I preferred death
To be my only savior
Fuck all that's left
From my disorderly behavior
I'm not fucking perfect
But I stand accuse
What you expect
From someone that has been used
And misdirect, and disrespect
But that's only the fucking beginning
So I neglect, my life reflects
My endless fear of living
Love will be, the death of me
I was told when I was young
Life has fuck me again, again
But now who's holding the fucking gun
I'm not sorry
And I won't apologize
I'm not fucking pretending
I'm not sorry
When I'm the one that's been victimize
So I lay dying, it's not always a happy ending
Beautiful poem dude, excellent work . . . i little depressing though but still
an excellent work . . . hey, you know i spy that you are in big trouble . . .
and i think it is a female work all this depressing. Don't let them dawn man . .
. anyway and what do you mean that deppends from who is replying? . . . i tthink
you have weird thoughts *lol* i guess that this also appears at you poems too .
. . well, i have reply . . . and know what?
Quote by ZetmanBeautiful poem dude,
excellent work . . . i little depressing though but still an excellent work . .
. hey, you know i spy that you are in big trouble . . . and i think it is a
female work all this depressing. Don't let them dawn man . . . anyway and what
do you mean that deppends from who is replying? . . . i tthink you have weird
thoughts *lol* i guess that this also appears at you poems too . . . well, i
have reply . . . and know what?
Hey thanks again man... (for replying) And all I mean by
depending is that if anyone really is reading this stuff... I like it but I'm
not sure if people are just being nice or do they really enjoy my poems... well
thanks again...
Thanks for posting too Milkiyo ^_^ Your poems are good
as well so I hope you start writing as well...
Well, i decided to write a poem about lost love (again I know)
~ Unspoken love ~
Love will bring you back to me
As life will pass us by
Lost within your memories
And left us cold inside
Though the thought of you and I
Sometimes makes me cry
As the heart you left broken
A love unspoken will slowly die
You were everything to me
My very existing was because of you
As for what was missing
You were resisting my love for you
For what affects you, affects me
Though I don't fall the same
Still I remain the person you always knew
As the promise I made to you,
Unbroken, unspoken and left unchanged
Love will bring you back to me
A hope that's been deceived
As hearts united in destiny
A fate I once believe
So my beloved please understand
My unspoken love is who I am
Within my heart, within my mind,
I will always love you for all time...
~ Regardless ~ : Pretty romantic one! It's good! I like this one, it's like
there is still a little light in the dark to guide us.
~ The Lost of Innocent ~ : This one is really sad! Sorrow and powerless...
~ With or without you ~ : This one is okay, Don't know what to add...
~ The Ghost of you ~ : It's great! Seems like you're hunted (and haunted) by
failling love!
~ True illusion ~ : Pretty much my favorite from all your poems, probably
because it touches me more and can be transfered as something I already lived!
Bravo!
~ Confused ~ : confusing... lol!
~ In memories of you ~ Wow! love it! (I wish I can express myself that well and
that easily! )
~ Kevin ~ : I hope you'll make your son read it someday!
~ Selfish Ambition ~ : Like you told me, life rarely goes the way we plan it to
be! Good one!
~ World of Pretend ~ : Make me remember a quote I saw somewhere... probably from
a song, but don't remember which one... it was something like this : If I take
off the masks, where will I be able to hide? That's good, really good!
I'll comment on the second page of your poems later... Pretty good job thow!
Keep it up please
Ciao!
damn your poems are bloody good as usual and always will be ^0^....hehe its just
that you used the F word on one of your poems...^^ your topics mostly consist of
depression, love and your life...its like i can feel wat you feel because these
poems reveals it....screw love! its always the one that makes someone depressed
based on my observation...one of my family member got her heart shattered and
she was like so depressed at that moment but...she pulled herself together so
now shes bak to normal after months which is good....your poem ~on my own~ no
one is alone in this world and "face my death all alone"? anyfing can
happen in the future...poem ~no happy ending~, i hate unhappy endings! i cant
stand it but thats the harsh reality....-__-...all your poems are brilliant! i
can tell that they are made from the bottom of your heart....thanks again for
sharing it with us....they will always be the best for me*two thumbs up* ^___^
Wow! Man your last poem left me without word . . . so different from the other
ones . . . ~ Unspoken love ~ . . . love means a lot to a man . . . Your poem is
realy tuch me my friend . . .
I will like to add that of course there is ppl that reads your poem. And you are
realy good man, realy good . . . And i can't speak for the other readers but for
me your poems is the best and i don't feel nice, believe me. So, i guess that
the others too love your poems . . . that is the reason that came here again and
again just to read your new ones . . . thats all.
Hey Savior!
I`m happy you decided to keep on writing, I think you know. Alright now let me
comment on your latest works. The first one ("no happy ending") is
very good and emotional again. But in my opinion you use a certain word (which
is fuck) a litttle bit too often,. There is nothing wrong about this word, but I
think if you wouldn`t have used it that much it would have put a stronger
emphasis on the things and terms related to it in that context. But I guess you
used it to express your thoughts and feelings which is good.
The second one ("Unspoken love") is so deep again, I can relate to it.
Especially I like the lines "as the heart you left broken a love unspoken
will slowly die". So thanks again for making my day better!
Quote by MilkiyoWah....your new poem is
so beautiful and touching^^
nice one! If only I can fav it..
Thanks for the comment...
sometimes I feel the same with topics that I really like but will only pass by
because we don't have a top 10 thread thingy.
Quote by RhiyaLynn~ Regardless ~ :
Pretty romantic one! It's good! I like this one, it's like there is still a
little light in the dark to guide us.
~ The Lost of Innocent ~ : This one is really sad! Sorrow and powerless...
~ With or without you ~ : This one is okay, Don't know what to add...
~ The Ghost of you ~ : It's great! Seems like you're hunted (and haunted) by
failling love!
~ True illusion ~ : Pretty much my favorite from all your poems, probably
because it touches me more and can be transfered as something I already lived!
Bravo!
~ Confused ~ : confusing... lol!
~ In memories of you ~ Wow! love it! (I wish I can express myself that well and
that easily! )
~ Kevin ~ : I hope you'll make your son read it someday!
~ Selfish Ambition ~ : Like you told me, life rarely goes the way we plan it to
be! Good one!
~ World of Pretend ~ : Make me remember a quote I saw somewhere... probably from
a song, but don't remember which one... it was something like this : If I take
off the masks, where will I be able to hide? That's good, really good!
I'll comment on the second page of your poems later... Pretty good job thow!
Keep it up please
Ciao!
These are some nice comments you made Lynn, Thank you ^_^
You like the poem "true illusion" which was one of my fav in high
school as well. Thanks for being honest ^^
Quote by kawaiikiyomidamn your poems
are bloody good as usual and always will be ^0^....hehe its just that you used
the F word on one of your poems...^^ your topics mostly consist of depression,
love and your life...its like i can feel wat you feel because these poems
reveals it....screw love! its always the one that makes someone depressed based
on my observation...one of my family member got her heart shattered and she was
like so depressed at that moment but...she pulled herself together so now shes
bak to normal after months which is good....your poem ~on my own~ no one is
alone in this world and "face my death all alone"? anyfing can happen
in the future...poem ~no happy ending~, i hate unhappy endings! i cant stand it
but thats the harsh reality....-__-...all your poems are brilliant! i can tell
that they are made from the bottom of your heart....thanks again for sharing it
with us....they will always be the best for me*two thumbs up*
^___^
Your pretty right but it's hard to write a poem about
something I don't feel... as for you thinking no one is alone... when you're
older you understand that everyone has their own life and everything you do
sometimes just seems to bother people... You hate one of my poems "No happy endding" it's ok... I guess I swear too much but thanks
for being honest. Wow! Thanks for being so nice with the comments ^^ thanks...
the best? thanks for feeling that way about it...
Quote by ZetmanWow! Man your last poem
left me without word . . . so different from the other ones . . . ~ Unspoken
love ~ . . . love means a lot to a man . . . Your poem is realy tuch me my
friend . . .
I will like to add that of course there is ppl that reads your poem. And you are
realy good man, realy good . . . And i can't speak for the other readers but for
me your poems is the best and i don't feel nice, believe me. So, i guess that
the others too love your poems . . . that is the reason that came here again and
again just to read your new ones . . . thats all.
Dam people! Thanks! you guys say the nicest things about
my poem. Dam! You really think that way you will keep on hearing the same thing
over and over you know... But if you like it? I'll keep on writing. Thanks
man!
Quote by 13mdHey Savior!
I`m happy you decided to keep on writing, I think you know. Alright now let me
comment on your latest works. The first one ("no happy ending") is
very good and emotional again. But in my opinion you use a certain word (which
is fuck) a litttle bit too often,. There is nothing wrong about this word, but I
think if you wouldn`t have used it that much it would have put a stronger
emphasis on the things and terms related to it in that context. But I guess you
used it to express your thoughts and feelings which is good.
The second one ("Unspoken love") is so deep again, I can relate to it.
Especially I like the lines "as the heart you left broken a love unspoken
will slowly die". So thanks again for making my day
better!
Hey, you guys made me feel like writing again with
the comments you guys make. I do agree with you about using the f word but you
got it pretty right by me expressing my feelings. And if you think I made your
day? you made mine as well by saying all you did... it's really nice of you
thanks for your comment and your opinion as always...
Dam! I wrote alot of thanks but I just wanted to let you guys know that I
appreciate it again and again. Wow! Thanks... My next poem it's ok I guess but
it has to do with your believes in some way. So as always... I want your honest
opinion on it... I wrote this a few weeks back but didn't know if I should post
it up
~ Between Good and Evil ~
Angel, I am not
Just a devil in disguise
Curse this mortal heart
Just a victim to live and die
So I was brought up
To do what others believe is right
Confuse and caught up
To choose between the darkness and the light
The difference between night and day
As the truth will set me free
Though I travel in shades of gray
Forgive me father for my honesty
I know I have sin, for I let the evil in
A mistake I will not change
From the time my life begins
I regret not for who I had became
I'm the devil doing gods work
Even knowing that he is damn
Between good and evil, if one converts
Does that truly defines a man?
whoa...there's a whole lot of meaning in this...especially the define a man
part..haha, guess we're a devils and angels combination..a really beautiful
masterpiece, keep it up!^^
sw33t poetry... its late i dont have the time and the concentration to read al
your poets... so so... i will read it tomorrow... gomen... inteligent comment
will follow as well...
Wow! You descibe the inner confusion of someone very good . . . what are we? . .
. angels or devils . . . i guess that we are what we choose to be . . . devils
to someones and at the same time angels to someone else . . .
This one was very good too . . . keep up man . . .
so kool! between light and darkness
excellent poem again !
kinda remind me of dark and krad hehe...sory a bit short on comment here...but
you know that your poems will always the best for me^^ laterz!
As always I like to take a moment to thank every one ^^
Quote by Milkiyowhoa...there's a whole
lot of meaning in this...especially the define a man part..haha, guess we're a
devils and angels combination..a really beautiful masterpiece, keep it up!^^
Hey, thanks for the nice comment you made... I'm glad you
got the meaning toward what I was trying to say...
Quote by DcGsw33t poetry... its late i dont
have the time and the concentration to read al your poets... so so... i will
read it tomorrow... gomen... inteligent comment will follow as well...
nice ryhmes... full of messages
Hey Thanks for replying to topic
Quote by ZetmanWow! You descibe the inner
confusion of someone very good . . . what are we? . . . angels or devils . . . i
guess that we are what we choose to be . . . devils to someones and at the same
time angels to someone else . . .
This one was very good too . . . keep up man . . .
Hey man!
Thanks! I will try my best to do what I can if I can that is"lol It's
getting harder to do because I don't want to write about the same old
stuff...
Quote by kawaiikiyomi so
kool! between light and darkness
excellent poem again !
kinda remind me of dark and krad hehe...sory a bit short on comment here...but
you know that your poems will always the best for me^^
laterz!
Hey, I don't mind short comment as long as it was a
reply... it's good enough for me. Though I haven't seen a bad reply yet about my
poem so I cross my fingers. But as always... thanks for your comment
^_^
Well, it's been awhile I know but like I said... it's getting harder to make my
poems without sharing somewhat the same topic as the few others... I mean I
wrote a few other poems already but I don't want to post it because it falls in
the same place as being down and depress... I'm pretty sure you guys/girls are
pretty much sick of that. I might post it up later when I go blank completely...
Anyway, I decided to write a poem about my favorite month (December) The poem
will explain a bit about it but just to let everyone know... I was born in
December (close to christmas)
~ Upon my December ~
Once upon my December
It's snow forever as I remember
The winter breeze that chill the air
Made me at ease as I was passing here
I felt the joy the season brings
Within my soul for everything
A timeless past I wish would last
Another year has gone too fast
This bitter cold, has made me whole
A story told as life unfolds
The person I became to be
My December means that much to me
Always has a place in my heart
Through the years I have discovered
That my life ends and starts
Upon the moments of my December
Hehe i love December too . . . i was born on the December too. At 27th od the
December . . . and i love this month . . . The cold of winter makes me feel
alive . . .
. . . i love your poem . . .
thanks lara for replying again ^_^ though do you really see people get bury all the time? Well, it takes me a day or a few hours to write a poem to answer your questions... lately though, I try to write a poem or 2 before so I would have to post up when you guys/girls reply. Thanks for you kind comments as well...
Wow! thanks man! You really gave me alot of encouragement with that comment. Thanks!!!!!! Now that you mention that line... it does sound pretty cool lol
Well, I try to get an idea of what to write about but no one really gave me any
So my next poem is something I thoght about awhile back but just
revise and made it new all together. Hope you guys/girls like it... It's about
time...
~ Forever and Today ~
A promise of forever
Has lost its way today
For what is next to never
Will only fade away
For what hold us together
A friendship that will always last
Will we fail to discover
That tomorrow has come too fast
As moments turn to memories
Days has pass me by
Will I recover before forever?
And remember to say good-bye
Will I find in time
In life, we all play a part
And that mankind is blind
To know what's forever in your heart...
Hello!!
I just finished reading all your poems. Certain are better than others but you are really a good poet!! The difference between someone who can write well and a good poet is that you can feel their emotions from what you read! It is true that some some your poems are truely sad, but I guess it's better to write to express your feelings than to keep everything inside! You really have a great talent and I hope you'll continue to share your work with us! Because believe it or not, your poems changed a little part inside me! Little things like that can make a big difference in someone's life! See you around I hope!
What I want to say can not express what your comment means to me ^_^ Thank you for replying... I really happy (as stupid as it sound lol) that my poems change alittle part inside... I hope it's a good part though
but really you're so nice in your words for saying all you did. Thank
you!!!!!!
Well, works been super busy and I didn't really finished what I need to do. I'll do it tomorrow lol Well, this is my new poem I just wrote... it's weird ( has it's up and down)
~ Running on Empty (no more) ~
It's best you keep a distant
And denied my own existent
It's better if I just go away
Engulf by deception
Without a perception
For things has always been this way
For I never meant to hurt you
Give you hope and then desert you
It was not what I intent it to be
I will only hold you down
Put your life into the ground
If you choose to be with me
Though in the end I can't denied you,
Forever I would be beside you
For you always been so sweet
I just wanted to be honest
For you I love, so I will promise
For you make my life complete
So my heart I will surrender
To your love that's fully render
For you're all that I got
For I know what it is to burn
For what was lost has been return
For you had mend my broken heart
I'm running on empty
Though I'll be all right
Knowing I'm not on my own
I'm running on empty
All my life
But for once I'm not running alone
Hey Dark Savior, good job again. I love the "Forever and Today" poem because (unfortunately) I know these emotions quiet well and it feels just like you wrote it. The other one is good, too. I like the rhyme scheme but the flow changes a bit. Nevertheless you`re able to catch a certain feeling again. Keep on writing!
Hey man! Thanks again as always for being honest about your opinion ^_^ I agree I didn't like "the other" lol as well. Anyway, it's cool that you feel and understand what saying. So thanks
Well, I decided not to write anymore poems for now and end this chapter of life until... I don't know... I get a better idea of what to write about. Plus it seems like it's lossing interest anyway. So, I'll leave with how I feel like in the end of it all (my life) becaue this is the out come my life would be in the end... Thanks everyone for always replying and for the kind comments you guys/girls gave.
~ My own ~
On my own
Without a choice
Bitter tone
Within my voice
Like the torment
In my soul
Left me silent
As I grow old
Drench my self
Within the rain
Ease the heart
Not the pain
Dim my view
Blur my vision
Turn into
This condition
As the person
Before you now
Much have worsen
As I allow
Need not bless
Or love me less
I am better on my own
Gave my best
So here I rest
Face my death all alone...
Hey man, a masterpiece of work. I guess it`s the right poem to end this chapter of your life:-)).
Nevertheless I`m sorry you stop writing for a while cause I´m gonna miss your poems. But it`s ok, life is full of experiences to write about and I´m curious what your next poem will be about. C U soon
Hey man, nice poems you have here . . . but i think that last one it takes you a little down . . . i hope you don't mean that " . . . So here I rest
Face my death . . . " . . . really i hope you don't mean that . . . cause you say above that your poems is getting out of you life . . .
thanks again, again and again for always replying. I decided to just write 1 poem a week or 2 from now on depending who's or if anyone replys
Don't get the wrong idea man
I was just trying to say that I will die alone... meaning without anyone that
would love me. But thanks for replying to my poems
I know I said I'll stop writing for a bit but I thought I post this up since it's fresh in my head. I was depress when I wrote this... It's not like my other poem in a way and I use alot of swears...
~ No happy ending ~
Between the blade
And the flesh
Between the blood
And the mess
Within the thoughts
In my head
And the fainting
Taste of lead
Fucking depress
Is not the word...
With all this stress
That has occurred
So I preferred death
To be my only savior
Fuck all that's left
From my disorderly behavior
I'm not fucking perfect
But I stand accuse
What you expect
From someone that has been used
And misdirect, and disrespect
But that's only the fucking beginning
So I neglect, my life reflects
My endless fear of living
Love will be, the death of me
I was told when I was young
Life has fuck me again, again
But now who's holding the fucking gun
I'm not sorry
And I won't apologize
I'm not fucking pretending
I'm not sorry
When I'm the one that's been victimize
So I lay dying, it's not always a happy ending
Beautiful poem dude, excellent work . . . i little depressing though but still an excellent work . . . hey, you know i spy that you are in big trouble . . . and i think it is a female work all this depressing. Don't let them dawn man . . . anyway and what do you mean that deppends from who is replying? . . . i tthink you have weird thoughts *lol* i guess that this also appears at you poems too . . . well, i have reply . . . and know what?
lovely....keep posting more^^
Hey thanks again man... (for replying) And all I mean by depending is that if anyone really is reading this stuff... I like it but I'm not sure if people are just being nice or do they really enjoy my poems... well thanks again...
Thanks for posting too Milkiyo ^_^ Your poems are good as well so I hope you start writing as well...
Well, i decided to write a poem about lost love (again I know)
~ Unspoken love ~
Love will bring you back to me
As life will pass us by
Lost within your memories
And left us cold inside
Though the thought of you and I
Sometimes makes me cry
As the heart you left broken
A love unspoken will slowly die
You were everything to me
My very existing was because of you
As for what was missing
You were resisting my love for you
For what affects you, affects me
Though I don't fall the same
Still I remain the person you always knew
As the promise I made to you,
Unbroken, unspoken and left unchanged
Love will bring you back to me
A hope that's been deceived
As hearts united in destiny
A fate I once believe
So my beloved please understand
My unspoken love is who I am
Within my heart, within my mind,
I will always love you for all time...
~edit the last line
Wah....your new poem is so beautiful and touching^^
nice one! If only I can fav it..
~ Regardless ~ : Pretty romantic one! It's good! I like this one, it's like there is still a little light in the dark to guide us.
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~ The Lost of Innocent ~ : This one is really sad! Sorrow and powerless...
~ With or without you ~ : This one is okay, Don't know what to add...
~ The Ghost of you ~ : It's great! Seems like you're hunted (and haunted) by failling love!
~ True illusion ~ : Pretty much my favorite from all your poems, probably because it touches me more and can be transfered as something I already lived! Bravo!
~ Confused ~ : confusing... lol!
~ In memories of you ~ Wow! love it! (I wish I can express myself that well and that easily!
~ Kevin ~ : I hope you'll make your son read it someday!
~ Selfish Ambition ~ : Like you told me, life rarely goes the way we plan it to be! Good one!
~ World of Pretend ~ : Make me remember a quote I saw somewhere... probably from a song, but don't remember which one... it was something like this : If I take off the masks, where will I be able to hide? That's good, really good!
I'll comment on the second page of your poems later... Pretty good job thow! Keep it up please
Ciao!
damn your poems are bloody good as usual and always will be ^0^....hehe its just that you used the F word on one of your poems...^^ your topics mostly consist of depression, love and your life...its like i can feel wat you feel because these poems reveals it....screw love! its always the one that makes someone depressed based on my observation...one of my family member got her heart shattered and she was like so depressed at that moment but...she pulled herself together so now shes bak to normal after months which is good....your poem ~on my own~ no one is alone in this world and "face my death all alone"? anyfing can happen in the future...poem ~no happy ending~, i hate unhappy endings! i cant stand it but thats the harsh reality....-__-...all your poems are brilliant! i can tell that they are made from the bottom of your heart....thanks again for sharing it with us....they will always be the best for me*two thumbs up* ^___^
Wow! Man your last poem left me without word . . . so different from the other ones . . . ~ Unspoken love ~ . . . love means a lot to a man . . . Your poem is realy tuch me my friend . . .
I will like to add that of course there is ppl that reads your poem. And you are realy good man, realy good . . . And i can't speak for the other readers but for me your poems is the best and i don't feel nice, believe me. So, i guess that the others too love your poems . . . that is the reason that came here again and again just to read your new ones . . . thats all.
Hey Savior!
I`m happy you decided to keep on writing, I think you know. Alright now let me comment on your latest works. The first one ("no happy ending") is very good and emotional again. But in my opinion you use a certain word (which is fuck) a litttle bit too often,. There is nothing wrong about this word, but I think if you wouldn`t have used it that much it would have put a stronger emphasis on the things and terms related to it in that context. But I guess you used it to express your thoughts and feelings which is good.
The second one ("Unspoken love") is so deep again, I can relate to it. Especially I like the lines "as the heart you left broken a love unspoken will slowly die". So thanks again for making my day better!
Thanks for the comment... sometimes I feel the same with topics that I really like but will only pass by because we don't have a top 10 thread thingy.
These are some nice comments you made Lynn, Thank you ^_^ You like the poem "true illusion" which was one of my fav in high school as well. Thanks for being honest ^^
Your pretty right but it's hard to write a poem about something I don't feel... as for you thinking no one is alone... when you're older you understand that everyone has their own life and everything you do sometimes just seems to bother people... You hate one of my poems
"No happy endding" it's ok... I guess I swear too much but thanks
for being honest. Wow! Thanks for being so nice with the comments ^^ thanks...
the best? thanks for feeling that way about it...
Dam people! Thanks! you guys say the nicest things about my poem. Dam! You really think that way you will keep on hearing the same thing over and over you know... But if you like it? I'll keep on writing. Thanks man!
Hey, you guys made me feel like writing again with the comments you guys make. I do agree with you about using the f word but you got it pretty right by me expressing my feelings. And if you think I made your day? you made mine as well by saying all you did... it's really nice of you thanks for your comment and your opinion as always...
Dam! I wrote alot of thanks but I just wanted to let you guys know that I appreciate it again and again. Wow! Thanks... My next poem it's ok I guess but it has to do with your believes in some way. So as always... I want your honest opinion on it... I wrote this a few weeks back but didn't know if I should post it up
~ Between Good and Evil ~
Angel, I am not
Just a devil in disguise
Curse this mortal heart
Just a victim to live and die
So I was brought up
To do what others believe is right
Confuse and caught up
To choose between the darkness and the light
The difference between night and day
As the truth will set me free
Though I travel in shades of gray
Forgive me father for my honesty
I know I have sin, for I let the evil in
A mistake I will not change
From the time my life begins
I regret not for who I had became
I'm the devil doing gods work
Even knowing that he is damn
Between good and evil, if one converts
Does that truly defines a man?
whoa...there's a whole lot of meaning in this...especially the define a man part..haha, guess we're a devils and angels combination..a really beautiful masterpiece, keep it up!^^
sw33t poetry... its late i dont have the time and the concentration to read al your poets... so so... i will read it tomorrow... gomen... inteligent comment will follow as well...
nice ryhmes... full of messages
Wow! You descibe the inner confusion of someone very good . . . what are we? . . . angels or devils . . . i guess that we are what we choose to be . . . devils to someones and at the same time angels to someone else . . .
This one was very good too . . . keep up man . . .
excellent poem again
As always I like to take a moment to thank every one ^^
Hey, thanks for the nice comment you made... I'm glad you got the meaning toward what I was trying to say...
Hey Thanks for replying to topic
Hey man! Thanks! I will try my best to do what I can if I can that is"lol It's getting harder to do because I don't want to write about the same old stuff...
Hey, I don't mind short comment as long as it was a reply... it's good enough for me. Though I haven't seen a bad reply yet about my poem so I cross my fingers. But as always... thanks for your comment ^_^
Well, it's been awhile I know but like I said... it's getting harder to make my poems without sharing somewhat the same topic as the few others... I mean I wrote a few other poems already but I don't want to post it because it falls in the same place as being down and depress... I'm pretty sure you guys/girls are pretty much sick of that. I might post it up later when I go blank completely... Anyway, I decided to write a poem about my favorite month (December) The poem will explain a bit about it but just to let everyone know... I was born in December (close to christmas)
~ Upon my December ~
Once upon my December
It's snow forever as I remember
The winter breeze that chill the air
Made me at ease as I was passing here
I felt the joy the season brings
Within my soul for everything
A timeless past I wish would last
Another year has gone too fast
This bitter cold, has made me whole
A story told as life unfolds
The person I became to be
My December means that much to me
Always has a place in my heart
Through the years I have discovered
That my life ends and starts
Upon the moments of my December
Hehe i love December too . . . i was born on the December too. At 27th od the December . . . and i love this month . . . The cold of winter makes me feel alive . . .
. . . i love your poem . . .
I should've composed all my poems together in one thread.