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~ Kiss from the Darkness ~ . . . 'Love... a broken record... and this is my song ' i think you describe love very good . . . nothing more to say . . .

~ Significant others ~ . . . maybe a hope of love and romance? . . . and it is worth it? . . . maybe, who kmows . . .

thank you for the beautiful poem, and dont worry, i am not going to kill you, altho, he might kill me for telling you ^^
and, thank you for saying this:
"A matter of the heart that's been criticize
So I judge not for I realize
That love needs not to apologize"
I appreciate your honesty, i really do, you ve been really great kenada.

hm...significant other's not bad..thanks for sharing..I see u dedicated it to someone..that's nice^^

Quote by Zetman~ Kiss from the Darkness ~ . . . 'Love... a broken record... and this is my song ' i think you describe love very good . . . nothing more to say . . .

~ Significant others ~ . . . maybe a hope of love and romance? . . . and it is worth it? . . . maybe, who kmows . . .

Hey Zetman! I have to say... you quote my favorite line as well in"Kiss in the Darkness" Let me explain ^^ For people that don't know the term "Broken record" is used to describe something the constantly repeats it self over and over... and this is my song... it never finish completely but always get to the point that it skip and replays the line over and over. You have alot of my respect for pointing that out... Thanks... "Significant Others" Had alot of hidden messages but you have a good idea as I can tell... Thanks for replying

Quote by melonbrustthank you for the beautiful poem, and dont worry, i am not going to kill you, altho, he might kill me for telling you ^^
and, thank you for saying this:
"A matter of the heart that's been criticize
So I judge not for I realize
That love needs not to apologize"
I appreciate your honesty, i really do, you ve been really great kenada.

You had me at Thank you ^^ and it's nice that you pick that line because it happens to be my favorite as well... and don't worry about it (the issues) or try not too. Thanks for replying

Quote by Milkiyohm...significant other's not bad..thanks for sharing..I see u dedicated it to someone..that's nice^^

Hey Milkiyo ^^ I would dedicated a poem to you as well if we talk and I knew you alot better... though you seems to like to keep things short and simple. Thanks for always giving your honest opinion on my poems though ^^

Well, I decided to dedicated another poem to another close friend of mine because she gave me the idea and always told me to have hope... and I would like to thank her for that within the lines of my poem... I also hope she don't mind... it's a simple poem...

~ Something to live for (hope) ~

I live for hope
For what tomorrow may bring
Though sometimes it feels hopeless
A new day will begin

Things will get better
If you have hope and believe
Something to live for
Something you need

I live for you
If you want me too
If you ask me why, I'll reply
Because I love you too

For you also play
A role in my life
The passing of days
And all through the night

I live for love
With every beat of my heart
Though every time I fall in love
I seem to fall apart

For my life may not be perfect
Regardless, I'll give my best today
In the end it all be worth it
For I know my life is only a love away

Simple poem my friend? . . . haha . . . well, the hope is everything in life . . . the one she told you that is a wise person and the one that give that hope to you is a precious person . . . i wish i have my precious person in my life and give me hope . . . in reality . . . man, you are in a mood and you give us an excellent poem and maybe a little hope . . . thank you and keep your hope close to your heart . . . never loose it cause without hope life means nothing . . .

~kiss from the darkness~ whoaa love...what can i say...it affects a person immensely when he/she is blinded by love that they cant even see wats going on....
check this out: (a friend forwarded me this through txt)
Love is a game. Sometimes you win, Sometimes you lose. But whatever your card is....wether CLUBS SPADES OR DIAMONDS....REMEMBER!
Dont ever play the *HEARTS*
isnt it cool lol
~Significant Others~
wow! this is so true! the poem is amazing!
thats wat i like about your poems kenada..theyre so realistic and no matter how much they hurt, you still convert it to poems^-^..
`Something to live for~
so i see...you live for love..personally, its not a good idea for me..^-^' its a bit sad, "i live for love....though every time i fall in love, i seem to fall apart" im gonna cry now...
i wonder, why people get hurt all the time by love but still keep looking for one? this does not necessarily means you but most peole do...
this is a cool saying (well not a saying but i made it my personal saying) ^__^
If someone were to break your heart, how would you react? break my heart...? Sorry no one gets that close to me. ^0^
ok i fink this is already a very long post but i hope you dont mind lol...

~ Something to live for (hope) ~: thank you for making this poem Kenada.. like you said, "A new day will begin".. ^__^

~ Something to live for (hope) ~ : Wow! See I knew you can do it Dark! :D That is a beautiful poem, very touching and I deeply wish for you to really feel this hope because you deserve the best! Thank you very much! ;)

Quote by DarkSavior
Things will get better
If you have hope and believe

For you also play
A role in my life

Though every time I fall in love
I seem to fall apart

I like this few parts lol..makes the poem more...alive :) the poem's quite nice but could have been better..the there's not much feeling in it..sorry but I can't feel much hope lol.. ^_^'
anyways..thanks for sharing^^

Quote by ZetmanSimple poem my friend? . . . haha . . . well, the hope is everything in life . . . the one she told you that is a wise person and the one that give that hope to you is a precious person . . . i wish i have my precious person in my life and give me hope . . . in reality . . . man, you are in a mood and you give us an excellent poem and maybe a little hope . . . thank you and keep your hope close to your heart . . . never loose it cause without hope life means nothing . . .

Hey, nice things you're saying there ^^ Thanks... Hope is all we have... right?

Quote by kawaiikiyomi~kiss from the darkness~ whoaa love...what can i say...it affects a person immensely when he/she is blinded by love that they cant even see wats going on....
check this out: (a friend forwarded me this through txt)
Love is a game. Sometimes you win, Sometimes you lose. But whatever your card is....wether CLUBS SPADES OR DIAMONDS....REMEMBER!
Dont ever play the *HEARTS*
isnt it cool lol
~Significant Others~
wow! this is so true! the poem is amazing!
thats wat i like about your poems kenada..theyre so realistic and no matter how much they hurt, you still convert it to poems^-^..
`Something to live for~
so i see...you live for love..personally, its not a good idea for me..^-^' its a bit sad, "i live for love....though every time i fall in love, i seem to fall apart" im gonna cry now...
i wonder, why people get hurt all the time by love but still keep looking for one? this does not necessarily means you but most peole do...
this is a cool saying (well not a saying but i made it my personal saying) ^__^
If someone were to break your heart, how would you react? break my heart...? Sorry no one gets that close to me. ^0^
ok i fink this is already a very long post but i hope you dont mind lol...

Wow! You wrote alot... ^^, Thanks I like what you said about the cards or what your friend told you... It's funny though how you feel like you will never love... knowing your young... in time, you will love. Love is define by the feeling you have toward someone that does not always have to be boyfriend but a family member or a close friend you hold dear. Thanks for all the kind comments... if I quote all your lines and express what you thoughts about it... I would go on and on... So I just tell you I pretty much agree with everything you said and Thank you for commenting on my pass as well ^^

Quote by melonbrust~ Something to live for (hope) ~: thank you for making this poem Kenada.. like you said, "A new day will begin".. ^__^

Yeah! Deeana, you should always have hope and today might not be your day but never denied tomorrow... Thanks for replying again ^^

Quote by RhiyaLynn~ Something to live for (hope) ~ : Wow! See I knew you can do it Dark! :D That is a beautiful poem, very touching and I deeply wish for you to really feel this hope because you deserve the best! Thank you very much! ;)

No, thank you for giving me the idea and to convince me to have more hope... I'm glad you like it ^^, thanks again...

Quote by Milkiyo

Quote by DarkSavior
Things will get better
If you have hope and believe

For you also play
A role in my life

Though every time I fall in love
I seem to fall apart

I like this few parts lol..makes the poem more...alive :) the poem's quite nice but could have been better..the there's not much feeling in it..sorry but I can't feel much hope lol.. ^_^'
anyways..thanks for sharing^^

lol, I said it was simple I see you agree ^_^' Just a simple poem to simple that needs not to worry too much but have more hope... I fall the same as them though... sometimes you can't help but feel hopeless. Thanks for replying and giving your honest opinion

Well, you guys reply and so will I ^_^ thanks again everyone... I decided to make a poem about regret and about people that don't realizes what they have until they lose it... So the message is say what you want to say now... before it's too late... It's again a simple poem... It's hard to come out with those deep poems, so for now... I'll keep it simple ^_^'

~ If only you knew ~

If only you knew... what you mean to me
Then you'll understand
And maybe then you will see
Why I am the way I am

If only you knew how much I care for you
You'll see and think... much differently
The things I do, I do for you
I hope you'll know... eventually

Between the stories that you told
And all the memories of you and me
You... I will always hold
In my heart for eternity

For I know how are
So you don't need to explain
You're my wish upon a star
An angel without name

A gift from heaven
...from up above
So I stay present
...in the name of love

Until the end, I'll die for you
Though death won't be end of me
I'll be the ghost that's always beside you
Even if we're not meant to be

You'll realizes I loved you so
And what I mean to you
If only you knew what you now know
You'll wish you told me... you love me too...

how sweet..*sniff*"a gift from heaven" thats so romantic lol
wow so much feelings in it!..."until the end ill die for you" XO whaaa! if my emotional friend reads this poem, she'll never stop crying....
even me, i cant help shed tears(i almost never cry unless im hurt really badly ^_^') thanks for the poem! :D

Dude! You always say i simple poem and maybe this is a simple but the messages are so . . . if i was a girl i'm sure i will be crying like the lady above . . . shit! 'You're my wish upon a star
An angel without name . . .
A gift from heaven
...from up above . . .
. . . You... I will always hold
In my heart for eternity . . . '
You make want to make a wish . . . so, i wish upon a star for an angel . . . a gift from the heavens to come to me and she and i to hold for an eternity . . . *sigh* man, you have give me a difficult night . . . how can i ever sleep tonight when i wish for my angel . . . and that wish never come true . . .

What can i say, its beautiful, I cried because i know how exactly how you feel. I hope he reads this poem..
"I'll be the ghost that's always beside you
Even if we're not meant to be"

Quote by kawaiikiyomihow sweet..*sniff*"a gift from heaven" thats so romantic lol
wow so much feelings in it!..."until the end ill die for you" XO whaaa! if my emotional friend reads this poem, she'll never stop crying....
even me, i cant help shed tears(i almost never cry unless im hurt really badly ^_^') thanks for the poem! :D

Wow! I would never thought you or anyone like this poem or be touch by it so much. Maybe you should let your friend read then ^^ thanks for comment and I'm sorry if i made you cry... I'll try to avoid writing this kind of poem then ^_^'

Quote by ZetmanDude! You always say i simple poem and maybe this is a simple but the messages are so . . . if i was a girl i'm sure i will be crying like the lady above . . . shit! 'You're my wish upon a star
An angel without name . . .
A gift from heaven
...from up above . . .
. . . You... I will always hold
In my heart for eternity . . . '
You make want to make a wish . . . so, i wish upon a star for an angel . . . a gift from the heavens to come to me and she and i to hold for an eternity . . . *sigh* man, you have give me a difficult night . . . how can i ever sleep tonight when i wish for my angel . . . and that wish never come true . . .

Hey man! I'm glad you like it... I guess it's simple poem because it's not hard to understand and I'm using simple words but thanks for liking it so much and I'm sure someday... all of us will find our one angel that's always watching out for us. Thanks again...

Quote by melonbrustWhat can i say, its beautiful, I cried because i know how exactly how you feel. I hope he reads this poem..
"I'll be the ghost that's always beside you
Even if we're not meant to be"

Deeana... I'm sorry that I also made you cry. but you and everyone capture the more then the simple words that's being use. and I would like to thank you and everyone else as well for trying to relate and understand my poems more. I know you can relate that's for sure. Maybe you should link him to this poem if you want him to read it... Thanks for reply though...

Well, it's Friday and this will be my last poem for the week since it's hard enough to write a poem a day. Here's a another simple words poem I wrote. It's about how you love someone but also hate them too at the same time. It's alittle funny but I was trying to cheer some of the people that feel down and don't really see love for what is... the ending will explain it all... Thanks everyone for giving me your honest opinion and the time to read and relate to my view in words through my poem. (I might just use this line someday to write a poem to thank all my friends... maybe not the exact words but close enough)

~ My love and hate for you ~

I love the way you smile
Though I'm not all into your looks
I hate the way you analyze me
And try to read me like a book

I hate the way you read into things
For more then what it is
I love to always shut you up
As I hold you near to kiss

I love the way you look at me
As I always look at you
I hate the way you look at others
Though I look at others too

I love the most is that your always true
How you always show me you care
How my days is better when I hear from you
How you pick me up from despair

So many things I love about you
More then words can ever say
Though I hate it when I lie to myself that I hate you
Because I don't really hate you in anyway...

~ If only you knew ~ : this one is amazingly beautiful! You describe it so well... simple words yes, but as Zetman said, the message is there, also the emotions eheh! It's like I can feel them as I read through the words!
~ My love and hate for you ~ : I like this one! As I believe love and hate are so near of each other, but so far apart at the same time!
Thanks for sharing your poems with us! :)

~ My love and hate for you ~: to be honest, i dont really like this one..the lines are too cheesy, too fake.. I dunno, its too romantic i guess.. I am sick of love poems ^__^ So sorry Ken, I still admire your ability.. Maybe do a dark angry hate poem..
now, that might cheer me up ..

Quote by RhiyaLynn~ If only you knew ~ : this one is amazingly beautiful! You describe it so well... simple words yes, but as Zetman said, the message is there, also the emotions eheh! It's like I can feel them as I read through the words!
~ My love and hate for you ~ : I like this one! As I believe love and hate are so near of each other, but so far apart at the same time!
Thanks for sharing your poems with us! :)

Thanks Lynn for the kind comment ^^ I'm glad you like my poems... You are always nice so I'm not sure if you are honest with me just because you don't want to be mean. But regardless... I know you don't like to lie so I take your word for thanks again...

Quote by melonbrust~ My love and hate for you ~: to be honest, i dont really like this one..the lines are too cheesy, too fake.. I dunno, its too romantic i guess.. I am sick of love poems ^__^ So sorry Ken, I still admire your ability.. Maybe do a dark angry hate poem..
now, that might cheer me up ..

Deeana! Thanks for being honest... I didn't really like it either but I thought I make some bitter sweet poems then just bitter. But since I want to chher you up... I decided to post another poem today and break my one day a poem routine. I was saving it for Monday too ^_^' so I hope you like this one more...

This poem is more about my life but I'm sure people can relate. It's not a happy poem but I wasn't in a happy mood when i wrote this...

~ Aftermath of a broken heart ~

Out of a world of laughter
My whole world seems to shatter
To realize I'm on my own
As I return to this broken home

So I denied my well being
Through my eyes I'm sick of seeing
A life in shades of shutter
To live to die to suffer

A pain that pierce the heart
Left me in vain right from the start
A different path from my beloved
An aftermath of a former loved

Toward an essence that left a void
A heart not resting, a hope destroy
A broken smile of the chosen few
Who loved and lost to fall for you

Out of a world of laughter
Is the story of my life
Whatever happens after
Will be my sacrifice

~ Aftermath of a broken heart ~: very good title, Kenada, definitely fits with the content of the poem... I love it! ^__^ thanks for trying to cheer me up

lovely and romantic..I like especially the love and hate poem^^
~ Aftermath of a broken heart ~
you described it well..I kinda like the last part..thanks for sharing^^

~ My love and hate for you ~ . . . love and hate its the 2 diferent sides of the same coin . . . which side do you choose?

~ Aftermath of a broken heart ~ . . . 'Out of a world of laughter' . . . 'To live to die to suffer' . . . very good Kenada . . . nice describion . . .

~ My love and hate for you ~ wow contrast in the poem which is eccentric i fink ^__^ sory kenada but i fink this is funny in a good way, "I hate the way you look at others
Though I look at others too" ^0^... this kinda cheered me up for sumreason ^_^'....thanks!
~aftermaths of a broken heart~ wow i let my friend read this poem cuz she just her heart kind of broken by this dude...she said its inspiring ^^ thanks again for sharing it!....all these are just the coolest ever! im not lying....^^

Quote by melonbrust~ Aftermath of a broken heart ~: very good title, Kenada, definitely fits with the content of the poem... I love it! ^__^ thanks for trying to cheer me up

I hope you like it ^^ thanks for the comment and I always like the title as well... I try my best to keep those I care for happy. You being one of them... always try to cheer up and see the better things in life

Quote by Milkiyolovely and romantic..I like especially the love and hate poem^^
~ Aftermath of a broken heart ~
you described it well..I kinda like the last part..thanks for sharing^^

Wow! You have nice comment for me without saying anything that you dislike... and I know your honest about it because you always tell me if you don't like something so thanks for saying waht you did ^^

Quote by Zetman~ My love and hate for you ~ . . . love and hate its the 2 diferent sides of the same coin . . . which side do you choose?

~ Aftermath of a broken heart ~ . . . 'Out of a world of laughter' . . . 'To live to die to suffer' . . . very good Kenada . . . nice describion . . .

I pick the side of love always... no question about it ^^ and thanks for your comments as always ^^

Quote by kawaiikiyomi~ My love and hate for you ~ wow contrast in the poem which is eccentric i fink ^__^ sory kenada but i fink this is funny in a good way, "I hate the way you look at others
Though I look at others too" ^0^... this kinda cheered me up for sumreason ^_^'....thanks!
~aftermaths of a broken heart~ wow i let my friend read this poem cuz she just her heart kind of broken by this dude...she said its inspiring ^^ thanks again for sharing it!....all these are just the coolest ever! im not lying....^^

I try to make it alittle funny to cheer people up to be honest ^^ I'm glad you caught it... it's just a story of a foolish person that blind to see that he has always love the person for who their are... and see pass the bitter things he doesn't like ^^ It's nice that your passing my view in my poems around I guess. I always wanted to help people out anyway toward how they feel. So thanks again for the comments and everything else...

Well, it's Monday and it took me forever to come up with a poem... I doubt I can do this again tomorrow since I'm fresh out of ideas. The next poem I will post has deeper meaning then the last few I believe... I would explain if need it but I'm hoping you guys/girls will understand what I'm trying to say...

~ Shallow Hearts ~

Reflect the heart reframe
Disregard still remain
Inside has not change
Love no less the same?

Image has present
Discriminate the heart content
Eyes half open are half blind
Shallow hearts of love divine

Criticize within our eyes
Mesmerize in uniform of lies
Fallen victim of deception
Recognize not our own reflection

As our hearts been captivate
Judgment has it's own mistake
Feeling of a bitter taste
Sealing off, though have to face

All that's lost within our lives
All that was in black and white
Curse and bind for all time
Shallowness within our minds

the poem sounds like it's lacking inspiration and ideas..the first part love no less the same? can u change it? it doesn't seem to fit..it's a nice poem but still there's been better..I know u can do better than this..

Quote by Milkiyothe poem sounds like it's lacking inspiration and ideas..the first part love no less the same? can u change it? it doesn't seem to fit..it's a nice poem but still there's been better..I know u can do better than this..

Dam! You cut me deep ^_^' this would be my last poem then... I'm lacking I know but I'll explain why I wrote what I did...

"Reflect the heart reframe" I was trying to say, if your heart reflect the person you are...

"Disregard still remain Inside has not change" Forget about how you look out side because inside you still remain...

"Love no less the same?" Would you still be love the same... questioning how shallow can someone be... that love you less since you don't look like you use too...

I guess it was alot of deep meaning that only I can understand and you believe that it lacks inspiration since I didn't want to use simple words that would tell the story of how shallow people are. Only see with they eyes and not what's inside and believe that their in love with someone until they find out it's not the right one for them. I'm not sure if you know that everyone of my line has meaning to it... you just have to read what I'm trying to say, But thanks for the comment and I believe this is my last poem... Thanks everyone for making me feel like I was good at one point ^^

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