~ Aftermath of a broken heart ~ : I guess I'm not in the mood to read those kind of depressed poems... I can't really feel it, but it's probably because I can't relate it to me, my heart is repaired!

~ Shallow Hearts ~ : I don't agree with Milkiyo! I liked this one very much! I loved how the words sounded together when spoken out loud. This is not the best you did, but that's not a reason to stop writing poems! Don't let others' opinions get through you! It's okay for you to take a little break, but don't stop forever! It would be a waste!

Okay, now I'm really going to sleep!

I remember you asking me about this matter before, and how you mentioned that you are somehow see appearance as important value besides personality..
Anyway, I dont understand why milkiyo hates the poem because i think this has more meaning to it than what it sounds.. I think its beautiful, please dont stop

0.o rockon kenada for saying,
"Criticize within our eyes
Mesmerize in uniform of lies
Fallen victim of deception
Recognize not our own reflection"
i fink that this is so tru! we are sumtimes shallow in judgement of other people... until its too late. that always happen. haha "eyes are half open are half blind" what can i say, its all cool and tru...well, this is my reading of the poem but i dunt know if thats wat you meant uhmm you kinda used big words hehe for a 15 year old like me but i get it in sum point ^^
good use of words as always...^^

0.0 please..don't stop your poems just because of my comment..T.T most of them are good...

Hhhmmm! I don't like very much . . .at least not all parts . . .
But ilke this part very much ' . . .Disregard still remain
Inside has not change . . . '
I like the idea that someone still like the inside . . . what if the outside has change . . . the inside is still the same, nomatters what . . .

And i will wait the next poem of you . . . no matter what . . .

I want to thank the people that made the comments whether good or bad... I been missunderstood all my life so i decided to write a poem about that... I know I said that would be my last poem but I was pretty down and alittle depress today. And when I am... I tend to put my feeling in words. Again this is not my best work... but this poem explain the person that I am alittle using simple words. I hope you guys like it... sorry for not quoting everyone this time seeing that I'm busy at work and all.

~ DarkSavior ~

You can call it destiny
Why I always give the best off me
Why I'm always so serious
In life we hold what's dear to us

As other may want to analyze me
And another finds ways to criticize me
I'm misunderstood for who I am
They all questions what they can't understand

An act... they say... I must be faking
The truth are lies... they say I'm making
Within my eyes... I been mistaken
Inside my heart is slowly breaking

Why do they think so ill off me?
Little by little it's killing me
Hope for the best, expect the worst
Maybe I'm insecure and this is my curse

Everyone has a story...
This is my regret
Always unease, always worry
For the people I just met

Which bring me stress
And a little depress
Why do I bother...
To always give my best?

Should I not care
For something I have no control
Something I cannot bare
As my heart is getting cold

I learn in life...
Things don't always go your way
The words don't come out right
And they don't understand what you say

I accept you for you...
Can you accept me for me?
As the person that I am...
And not the person you want me to be...

The words I say...
are honest and true
I don't like making promises...
But this I promise you...

edit: I was in a rush when I wrote this... ^^'

this is really meaningful but there's some english errors..I like the depth and truth of it especially the last part^^
not bad..keep it up *hugs*

Uhm... pretty personal poem Dark you wrote here! I like those kind of poems in which people just give their truth! The rest of my comment will go in a PM as it's more personal! and Oh! if you didn't understand yet, I like this poem!

how sad...its very depressing to read *cries*
wow your feelings are very well expressed....
ive gotta say its deep...
"Why do I bother...
To always give my best?
-__-...sumtimes i also wonder why i do this...
your poem is great even if its rushed ^^
i reckon this is one of your best poems(IMO anyways)
excellent work ^^..

Quote by Milkiyothis is really meaningful but there's some english errors..I like the depth and truth of it especially the last part^^
not bad..keep it up *hugs*

Hey! Thanks for the nice comments ^^ I did change a few errors... thanks for pointing it out too... *hugs back* I'm sorry for over reacting before too... I feel like an ass

Quote by RhiyaLynnUhm... pretty personal poem Dark you wrote here! I like those kind of poems in which people just give their truth! The rest of my comment will go in a PM as it's more personal! and Oh! if you didn't understand yet, I like this poem!

I understand and I'm forever thankful for your honest opinion ^^ You always have nice thinks to say though ^^,

Quote by kawaiikiyomihow sad...its very depressing to read *cries*
wow your feelings are very well expressed....
ive gotta say its deep...
"Why do I bother...
To always give my best?
-__-...sumtimes i also wonder why i do this...
your poem is great even if its rushed ^^
i reckon this is one of your best poems(IMO anyways)
excellent work ^^..

IMO you're always nice and always will be (I hope ) I already correct some errors but thanks for saying what you did I also believe that alot would agree and relate sometimes to that line "Why do I bother to always give my best" but the way I see it... you will always be a better person for doing so... (always giving your best) and in some ways... you make the world a better place for doing so

The next poem I wrote is inspire by someone I really care for at one point and still do. The poem will explain and again it's just my points of view... I'm just hoping that you guys/girls can relate...

~ Forgiveness ~

I ask for forgiveness
If I wrong you in any way
As god as my witness
Can you listen to what I have to say?

I never meant to hurt you
If ever you believe?
I never did desert you
I was so afraid you'd leave

Now theirs nothing left to say
Theirs nothing I can do
I'm sorry in so many ways
For nothing means more to me then you

As I realize that in your eyes
You will never see me the same
I apologize for the hurt inside
I will always remember your name

I lie to myself; you'll come back someday
As I lay restless in the night
And in my dreams off yesterday
I'm happy you were once a part of my life

I'm sorry for my unfitness
For all the things you want me to be
All I can do is ask for forgiveness
From here... till eternity

Heya Dark! I did say I don't like sad poems, but not that I don't like them, it's more because it makes me sad to read them and makes me think about sad things and after get depressed... eheh lol, yeah I am probably too much of a sensitive person! Enough about me, now about your poem, this sure is sad! But this sure express in a wonderful way how sometimes I would love to ask for someone to forgive me for something I did! ** I'm sorry for my unfitness
For all the things you want me to be
All I can do is ask for forgiveness
From here... till eternity ** Don't be the way people want you to be, you are already a great person, you need to believe it! Great poem Dark, really! Thanks a lot for sharing it!

this is sweet! i wish the people who are asking forgiveness from me (sadly theres none right now lol) wud do it like in the poem...
"for nothing means more to me than you" *sniff* this is really sweet... hope the "person" that inspired you reads this poem...
its really cool as always kenada ^^
btw, as u said earlier,
"IMO you're always nice and always will be (I hope )"
dunt worry i will always be nice but also honest..if my honesty does hurt you in the future, i always say sory to ease the hurt..^^" does dat make sense? -__-"
thanks for this poem!...^0^

~ DarkSavior ~ . . . a nice one Kenada . . . I like this part the most: 'I accept you for you...
Can you accept me for me?
As the person that I am...
And not the person you want me to be... "
Its really nice to get accept for what you are . . .

~ Forgiveness ~ . . . what can i say . . . its always good to ask for forgivness . . . but when you say that there is nothing you can do . . . don't know . . . i think its a lie . . . cause if you mean it then there is always something you can do . . . and we are all people and we are all making mistakes and sometimes we hurt the others but i think there is always something you can do . . .

~ Forgiveness ~ this poem is..tragic T.T
I like this part though:
As I realize that your eyes
You will never see me the same

there lies so much truth in it but there's still some errors..what do u mean by unfitness?

Great poeam Ken, but didnt i told you not to say sorry too much ^^
I hang out with boys way too much, I never take anything seriously...
Seriously, dont worry so much about it..I am fine, but thank you for the poem

Quote by RhiyaLynnHeya Dark! I did say I don't like sad poems, but not that I don't like them, it's more because it makes me sad to read them and makes me think about sad things and after get depressed... eheh lol, yeah I am probably too much of a sensitive person! Enough about me, now about your poem, this sure is sad! But this sure express in a wonderful way how sometimes I would love to ask for someone to forgive me for something I did! ** I'm sorry for my unfitness
For all the things you want me to be
All I can do is ask for forgiveness
From here... till eternity ** Don't be the way people want you to be, you are already a great person, you need to believe it! Great poem Dark, really! Thanks a lot for sharing it!

Hey Lynn, thanks for pointing that out ^^' I guess I don't really want to make you depress... I'll try to keep it in a happy mood XP but that also depends on my mood as well... about the line you quote...

"I'm sorry for my unfitness
For all the things you want me to be
All I can do is ask for forgiveness
From here... till eternity"

A wise person once told me that sometimes when you love someone so much... changing the person you are just to be with them means more then not trying to change what so ever... but thanks for saying I'm a great person and I feel the same toward you... Thanks again

Quote by kawaiikiyomithis is sweet! i wish the people who are asking forgiveness from me (sadly theres none right now lol) wud do it like in the poem...
"for nothing means more to me than you" *sniff* this is really sweet... hope the "person" that inspired you reads this poem...
its really cool as always kenada ^^
btw, as u said earlier,
"IMO you're always nice and always will be (I hope )"
dunt worry i will always be nice but also honest..if my honesty does hurt you in the future, i always say sory to ease the hurt..^^" does dat make sense? -__-"
thanks for this poem!...^0^

Hey Lara ^^ Thanks for making such a nice comment ^^ The line you quote has a few meaning but you can think what you want because in the end... you're right ^_^ it is sweet... and it's nice to know you will always be like that... and I understand don't worry and I rather you tell me the truth then have me live with a lie... remember that! Thanks again... for being so sweet and saying the things you did...

Quote by Zetman~ DarkSavior ~ . . . a nice one Kenada . . . I like this part the most: 'I accept you for you...
Can you accept me for me?
As the person that I am...
And not the person you want me to be... "
Its really nice to get accept for what you are . . .

~ Forgiveness ~ . . . what can i say . . . its always good to ask for forgivness . . . but when you say that there is nothing you can do . . . don't know . . . i think its a lie . . . cause if you mean it then there is always something you can do . . . and we are all people and we are all making mistakes and sometimes we hurt the others but i think there is always something you can do . . .

Hey Nikos, Thanks for stoping by again ^^ it's a simple line but you point out what I believe I live by now... I always accept people for who they are and not who I want them to be... at lease I want to bring out the best in them in the end if it means to change for the better then worst... So I understand both cases... I guess (I'm weird, didn't I told you that?lol) about "forgiveness"... sometimes I believe when someone made up their minds... you can't change their minds... so it does have some truth to it in my points of view ^^ Thanks for replying again...

Quote by Milkiyo ~ Forgiveness ~ this poem is..tragic T.T
I like this part though:
As I realize that your eyes
You will never see me the same

there lies so much truth in it but there's still some errors..what do u mean by unfitness?

Hey Milkiyo ^^, I make alot of errors all the time because I tend to go back and forth from my work and to MT to make post things... I have to make my self look busy sometimes you know... or else I will be told to do something else beside computer work... and I explain what "unfitness" means already in your GB but if anyone don't know... it's a noun that means: the condition of not being suitable, poor physical condition; being out of shape or out of condition, lacking the power to perform... Thanks for always looking out for my errors because I made alot yesterday and edit most of it after reading it again and again... I'm can be an idiot sometimes Thanks

Quote by melonbrustGreat poeam Ken, but didnt i told you not to say sorry too much ^^
I hang out with boys way too much, I never take anything seriously...
Seriously, dont worry so much about it..I am fine, but thank you for the poem

Hey Dee It's nice to know you liked it... I felt like I need to say sorry sometime for making an ass out of my self... at lease I think I did Well, not all guys are the same just to let you know... just because you hang out with boys does not mean that they are all alike... or shouldn't take them seriously... I am glad that you did like it and it was more off a poem that everyone can relate too but in the end... you did inspire me to wrote it... Thanks

The next poem I wrote is more dedicated to all my friends in MT but I got the idea from someone that always give me hope (you know who you are ^^) love can be define toward friends, family and the people you care for so don't take love as in "I'm in love you" it's more of... "I have so much love for you" Just pointing it out it's a simple poem but I thought everyone here should get a poem that showed what they mean to me as a friend...

~ MT Friends ~

What I do for you is never enough
Compare to what you do for me
Within my nightmares, you're my beloved
The angel that saved me

Through thick and thin, for better or worst
I always know you will be here for me
Second to none, you are my first
You always showed that you care for me

I'm forever grateful for the things you do
The hope you given me
I can relate when it comes to you
As a part of you live in me

And through my eyes you're all I see
I think of you always... endlessly
Though your heart and thoughts are not off me
I love you regardless... hopelessly

Maybe in my dreams
You'll feel the same
Though it does not mean
I ever want you to change

I have so much hope because of you
As long as I can remember
So this poem I dedicate to no one but you
For you I treasure in my heart forever

whoa..impressive!
I'm so touched LOL XP
btw..that's my real name..really..believe it or not >.>

haha wow this is a cool one! ^_^
uhmm i suppose i should thank you for dedicating it to us your friends at minitokyo...
as always(i know your sick of hearing it but i cant find anymore words to say it so yeah.. sory )an exceptional poem!^_^

Great poem! It's good that you can thank your friends and express what they mean for you! I'll say thank you for writing it, it's simple but I find it beautiful!

Beautiful poem Kenada . . . and if you are feeling this way about your friends . . . then your friends are not have the right words to thank you enough . . . thank you Kenada.

Quote by Milkiyowhoa..impressive!
I'm so touched LOL XP
btw..that's my real name..really..believe it or not >.>

Hey Thanks Milkiyo for the comment ^^,

Quote by kawaiikiyomihaha wow this is a cool one! ^_^
uhmm i suppose i should thank you for dedicating it to us your friends at minitokyo...
as always(i know your sick of hearing it but i cant find anymore words to say it so yeah.. sory )an exceptional poem!^_^

Hey Lara! I'm never sick of hearing Thanks "lol" I should be the one saying thanks anyway... because you always have something nice to say as always...

Quote by RhiyaLynnGreat poem! It's good that you can thank your friends and express what they mean for you! I'll say thank you for writing it, it's simple but I find it beautiful!

Wow Lynn! You had such a nice way of saying that ^^, Thanks...

Quote by ZetmanBeautiful poem Kenada . . . and if you are feeling this way about your friends . . . then your friends are not have the right words to thank you enough . . . thank you Kenada.

Hey Nikos! Thanks for replying as well... Hey, it's nice to know that you don't have the wrong idea "lol" you know what I mean

I just want to everyone that I'm taking a break from my oems for now... I'll write and post when ever I can but I'm not going to do one everyday... I don't have the time and I'm running out of ideas... Well, my next poem is about becoming the demon you hate... it also question whether killing someone that kill or hurt your love one will make things right...

~ Playing God ~

An eye for an eye
So many believe
You kill therefore you die
Will not relief the grief

A stolen beloved
A fatal mistake
A dawning off
The death in your fate

With all this hate
You have for him
As your heart break
So you condemn

The very being
That committed this
Overwhelm with feeling
The devil amidst

Befallen darkness
Within your heart
As all is colorless
You're playing god

Some may believe
In another level
Evil deceive
So you become the devil

The evil in
The heart of man
We all have sin
We all are damn

The world we live in
We're curse to be
Our own unforgiving
Worst enemy

hmm...not bad..sorry for the late comment..I feel kinda sleepy now..
the words chosen are nice..
my fav: We all have sin
We all are damn

~ Playing God ~: Written by a man whose love is stolen by another man?
"With all this hate
You have for him"
and
"The evil in
The heart of man"
Nice poem, Ken

A hard question Kenada . . . what will you do if someone has stole somethng or someone beloved? . . . "A stolen beloved
A fatal mistake . . . Befallen darkness
Within your heart . . . So you become the devil " . . . . Hhmmm! I really can't anwser to that . . . i don't know what i will do . . . maybe i will let my self to the darkness . . . who knows . . .