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idontdoperky

idontdoperky

used to live in the real world..

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yet another one of my lame poems, rate it if you wish.

Why?

i really am
Sorry
You had to die

But since this is a war
I dont have time
To pay respects or cry

Ill just have to march on
And kill some more
Who have not done a thing

But since this is a war
All I am is a soldier
And bullets are all I bring

We were told to come over
And fight
For our lives

And since this is a war
To save a country
Every soldier strives

No one wants to kill
Were just
Following orders

But since this is a war
We have to keep going
And press on past the border

I dont like the blood
The screams
From inside

But since this is a war
From it all
I cannot hide

I wanted to be a doctor
Or maybe
An EMT

But since this is a war
On the front lines
you can me

Ive seen all my buddies
Get hit
Or shot down

But since this is a war
There is no meaning
To a cry or frown

Do I wonder
Why were here?
I try

But since this is a war
I dont have time
To really ask: Why?�

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  • Jun 22, 2005

cardmage

cardmage

After you

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A poem about war... what a hateful thing... I mean war.

Life is tranquil, Death is peaceful...
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Its the transition that is troublesome...

  • Jun 22, 2005

AngelKate

AngelKate

~*Lady Sweetness*~

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Aww...that's sad, but that's pretty much how war is. Very nice poem.

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Not really walling much anymore D: Feel free to browse my gallery, though!
Thank you for the siggy and avy, Kitten! ^_^

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wow this is so .........hateful..........I LOVE IT keep it up k and keep senden them to me k.

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  • Jun 22, 2005

MetalFire

MetalFire

where is my head

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yes violence war sucks but we all get through it. i give this poem a 4/5 it just misses a little something i can't put my finger on it.

  • Jun 22, 2005

headaches4ever

headaches4ever

ruled by her cat

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sad.... waugh... now I am crying... boo hoo! go poetic no!

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  • Jun 24, 2005

NightDreamer

NightDreamer

Perfection is Me

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Sad poem but good rhymes!

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  • Jun 24, 2005

DarkSavior

DarkSavior

~Death's Adversary~

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I give this a 7 out of 10 ^_^' good rhymes but too much "since this is war" makes you sound more like a heartless robot then anything else. So I don't agree with some of the things being said because emotions will always play a role. Even though the emotions might kill you... you can't really change your self from the anger or sorrow or what ever it maybe in that moment of time.

I'd rather be hated for who I am rather than loved for who I pretend to be...

  • Jun 27, 2005

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