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You lay in bed with falling tears,
The endless memories,
And filling fears,
With light innocence,
And dark despair,
You wish to sleep,
And eternal sleep,
And dream forever,
Away from thy despair.
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I don't really care if sucks I am a much better artist anyway. <.< But tell me what you think! Be kind though! Thanks ^.^
OtakuChaosAngel
[sigmig]
Its a great poem.
Everyone always writes such sad poems, I think I'm going to write a happy poem. :)
Tragedy is when I cut my finger. Comedy is when you fall into an open sewer and die.
-Mel Brooks
Yeesh, it's'a me. ^^
It's...
A Poem, alright...
Not a flowing style, but it's good nontheless.
Even in death, we triumph.
I think its pretty good! Its got a dark theme, but its beautiful in its own way!
~ I am free, unfettered, and without a care in this world which revolves around love, beauty, freedom and life ~
it was cute i liked it
dont brate yourself it was good
dont cut off your own arm just to spite me
sig frm saku
feel the music...
I liked it, you have a good imagination keep on working XD
pd: I don't think it sucks^^
melissa...
Don't be sad because it finished, be happy because it happened...
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It's a great poem.^^
Will you make another poem?
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' I am the one and only Wing Zero
So beautifulT_T and clapping hands as well. Hope to see u make more poems^^
"I need the sunshine of your heavenly eyes, after the day's great sun. And if i had a rose for every time i
thought of you, I'd walk through a garden forever" Secret quote 
Quote by EsunaMeggyIts a great poem.
Everyone always writes such sad poems, I think I'm going to write a happy poem. :)
That is true. We have many young members on MT, and I certainly recall that when I was at that age (especially in high school) I wrote very similar poetry.
But Minitokyo is a wonderful community and everyone is welcome here, where we don't have to feel as though we are being judged each moment.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us AMC (can I call you that? :P). No matter what your poetry is or what you or others may think of it, you should always keep writing it. It's important to do that, and I think you might agree?
Also try to write a longer piece. And don't necesserily feel that your writing has to conform to any grammatical rules or otherwise. I think this piece has room for improvement, but as will all things, practice will produce those improvements in your writing you may desire.
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niiiice **big SMILE**
keep it up!
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