masterjesse89

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This was written for my creative writing class.... Some of the elements had to be in there.. so I apologize if some parts seem a little cheesy...

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The snow falls
erasing my footprints
a dark object appears
as I walk closer
I notice it is a girl

The snow falls
covering me with white
I hear footprints coming
I look out into the snow
and see a boy

The snow falls
the girls eyes
silver and boubtful
pull me in

The snow falls
the boys eyes
black and sorrowful
break my heart

The snow falls
the girl looks at me
her black hair
foreign in the snow

The snow falls
the boy looks at me
his pale skin
blending into the scenery

The snow falls
This girl
I've seen her
she overwhelms
my dreams

The snow falls
this boy
he seems so familair
I've seen him
in many of my dreams

The snow falls
Elle Pepper
she whispers
barely audible
over the roar of the wind

The snow falls
Alexander Salt
he says
closing his eyes
to the harsh wind

The snow falls
I reach
for her

The snow falls
I grasp
his hand

The snow falls
they walk
hand in hand
into the eternal
abyss
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So... how did you like it... If you didnt tell me what you didnt like... if you read it jsut comment... I really want to know... even if you hated it... Guess what I had to put into it....

Once I desire something... I cannot undesire it.
I cannot even try to resist. I will desire it until I have it.
But there is no end
No matter how much I take. I still want.

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I like the eerieness about it and the going back and forth between opposites.However the names were abit weird to me but overall it was really well written.Thanks for sharing. :)

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It was very good. I really liked it. If you start making another poem just PM me or something.

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Quote by colleenerbI like the eerieness about it and the going back and forth between
opposites.However the names were abit weird to me but overall it was
really well written.Thanks for sharing. :)

I agree!!! -chibi peace sign-

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b3nitora

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Very good indeed, it had a rather nice flow to it. You better get an A! LOL!

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maho-ho

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That pretty! It is romantic poem and very nice. But he is beautiful. Well Fact! :D

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tripleG

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To simply be

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OMG!!

It was absoultely beautiful (I am talking to you as an author) Good job! Excellent!!

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endsoftheworld99

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WOW! Honestly, its beautiful, i really enjoyed reading it. Its really emotional, really beautifully descriptive. You did an amazing job on this poem!

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hytokiri

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I like it, it as a strange romantic side, cngrats. Take care.

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