[Poem] A Garden

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tobiast88

tobiast88

No patience for fools.

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Hello everyone! Would you please tell me what you think of this poem I wrote in my absolutely ENDLESS free time? (class in other words... hehe..) Thank you all in advance...

A Garden

I walk in a garden of- no, not yet
A place of the senses, of scent and touch
Where even a God cannot see or judge
I walk in a garden of webs

I walk in a garden of- demon saints
That writhe or invoke among leaves and dark
And moonlight concealing, and shadowed hearts
I walk in a garden of paints

I walk in a garden of- blurry mist
That's artfully drawn over flowered smears
And fingerprints drift across painted fears
I walk in a garden of wisps

I walk in a garden of- try to guess
A garden of oils and nightly tints
Of blurred bodies, pleasure, and whispered hints
I walk in a garden of flesh

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wow!! nice, it liek starts out all nice and cute and then it goes to liek canabalisem!!LOL im jk it's really good!!! i congradulate u !! I can't spell, but u know that alreadylol
Todales

  • Oct 14, 2005
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Very nice poem of yours...Ahh talking english again!^^ Das Gedicht ist sehr schön! Mach weiter so!

  • Feb 04, 2006

KitClairvoyance

KitClairvoyance

The Secret Cookie Hoarder

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*takes deep breath...* O.o .. okay.. this poem is a mess.. >.< .. but it's not really bad actually.. ^^ ..it's kinda nice after u actually read it a few times.. it's pretty deep and kinda visual... a good job though.. ^^ .. Keep it up!

Kowalsky

Kowalsky

Someone still love you somewhere

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I really like your poem. It reminds me of... how to say ? I know it may be silly, but when I was younger, I met a boy in primary school who wrote things like that. I find it very "profond et pénétrant" as we say in french!:)...
Well.^_^' Sorry to write silly things on your page ! Gomen !

See you
C.S ;)

  • Mar 21, 2006

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