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[POEM]- Moon and Star Light Love - WARNING!! I'M A PERVERT!

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What do you think of my poem?

I was getting horny writing this!


Moon and Star Light Love

In the night illuminated by the moon and stars
Your light steps on the stones as you cross the shallow lake,
Brings joy and love into me
We have fun a lot
You are as rare as diamonds

When you fell into the lake,
I see your face fell slightly into pain,
A pain you do not enjoy
I can't help but stare at you, an angelic girl
Who's like a close sister I never had

Soon, I can't hold back
I know it, you know it
Your skirt is light as your steps,
And all is revealed to me
You wait for me, like a warm goddess

I see your breast, transparent as water soaked it
As vulnerable you look, you wait for me to show affection
As I give you pleasure, I can hear your heart,
Thumping as if you were just born
My affection is with you

I can't help but get excited
I feel your soft hand,
Holding onto my hardened gift to you
The lake feels much warmer

I now give you my gift
Please enjoy it to its fullest
I want you to be in eternal heaven,
With me

I can only be in heaven with you,
No world is beautiful without you

I can hear you scream in pain,
A pain you enjoy

As we show each other eternal affection,
Desire,
Pleasure,
And Love,
We are the only people in Eden,
Guarded by the moon and star,
As they shine their seal on us

SouthernBoy504

SouthernBoy504

Da Southern Don

Heh very original and very stimulatic SonicWind. This rather seductive poem sure does leave a lot to the imagination. :)

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j0n0

j0n0

Increadibly Cute

LOL. the waning is scaring all so many people away. Oh no, it's written by a pervert, he might try to do something, LOL. the poem however is ok, nothing to spectacular. I did like some of the abvious symbolism you used (e.g. IHolding onto my hardened gift to you). This poem lacks a "verbal" transition between the lines. It doesn't flow very well. But good job, and have fun.

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Sanzosgirl19

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KazukixJubei forever.

I'm very impressed. I really like it and I write stuff that's way more adult then this. ^_~. You captured a moment of lust and pleasure beautifuly and the title truly fits. You have talent for writing the more adult side of well writing. If you have any other Perverse poems as you call it I would love to here them. A+ (*^_~*)

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dezidez

dezidez

fanatic

O_O.....sonicwind....very romantic....it was an eye opener, very nice....your horniness as over welmed you...lol....bravo...do another one...ths is LOVELY....keep up the good work..i must admit i was getting turned on myself from reading this...bravo..i love it..its a keeper... XD XD :D ;) ;)

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ZeroFear

ZeroFear

That guy...

Your libido definitely rivals my own is all I'm gonna say about these poems you've been posting. :D

Very interesting and beautiful and origional. You are a very good poem writer, I commend you on your skills.

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Thanks everyone!

I must say, this is my favourite poem!

I think the last verse ends it well.


HAHAHAHAHAA!!! My sister got A's in English, but I only got lousy C's, but I'm a better writer than her!!

leosama84

leosama84

::Peace Maker::

dude.....
awesome!

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nice one!!! p*****T

Tias

Tias

Slither slither on the ground

lol i'm not good at understanding poems, but i didnt feel anything while reading this, just a text for me, lol but the topic text,

[POEM]- Moon and Star Light Love - warning!! I'M A pervert!

lol, while reading warning!! I'M A pervert!
people will be like OMG this is gonna be a sick poem

It is time for you to drown

Awesome poem dude! ^_^

Quote by Tiaslol i'm not good at understanding poems, but i didnt feel anything while reading this, just a text for me, lol but the topic text,
[POEM]- Moon and Star Light Love - warning!! I'M A pervert!
lol, while reading warning!! I'M A pervert!
people will be like OMG this is gonna be a sick poem


The thing is though, I'm not really a pervert. I only act perverted because I find it funny. Deep down I'm really a nice guy who longs for the perfect moment and mood.

The mood is what I like.

Thankies to all those who like my poem.

If you want to read more, just click on my username and a page should come up with all the threads I made.

Anaxa

Anaxa

Wish

In fact, i didn't think it was a pervert poem, it looks romantic ^_^

No matter what you play, if you can move the warm light
Idly sitting by, letting the tide slowly rise around and embrace you

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This isn't a perv poem. It is romantic and isn't onto much about the sex it's about more of the connection. Nice job

Hmm, I have nothing against you but... this poem was one of the worst poems I've ever read.... E <--- or F, the techniques weren't constructed well at all

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heavenANDearth

heavenANDearth

The Loner.....

It's very romantic! The mood is very good, and for me, I think its not about the sex but its all about the affection and connection of the two partners. Can I be your friend? I write poems too.

AngelKate

AngelKate

~*Lady Sweetness*~

I don't think its a perv poem. Its more of the joy and feelings attached to being intimate with the one you love. It's actually very well done. ^_^

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hmm...not as perverted as I thought I'll be with the warning sign LOL..I like some of the words..they're well used but not all blends in well

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