{POEM}Misunderstood.Craze

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Erm, this poem is based on a pysho's mind longing for freedom outside the bars (lol, that's not my experience, mind you...it's inspired from a movie I saw)

Breaking free from the accusations,
running away like a troubled soul,
All the curses and condemption,
voices spinning and haunting my howls,

Feeling like a refugee lost,
hunted by your closest love,
Emotional pain hurling in full force,
swallowing up the fleeting shadows...

No where to turn to,
no one to look for,
Feeling all the hatred ripping out,
insanity slowly taking over......

Numbed and empty inside,
lost is forever the person in the past,
Overwhelming the human I used to be,
the craze devouring me...........

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Sierra04

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My heart belongs to him..Erik...

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wow..dark and nice...cool poem my friend! Keep it up! I'll be waiting for more of your works...teehee...^_^

  • Nov 13, 2005
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Your meter switches from even to odd without a change in emphasis and there's no controlling metaphor. Some parts were good though. I likes the isocolon in lines 9 and 10.

  • Nov 13, 2005

Devildude

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wow....another inspiration....
wow....
movie...? which one, should be cool. sounds like underworld

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Rikkablurhound

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Movie? is it The exorcism of Emily ross?
Sorry for not being around... so busy lately... T_T

Itsumo1

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Coneja

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Dark...but...magic. Cool! :)

  • Nov 14, 2005

griffin

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Super Natty

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I love it of course. I think you should remove the explanation though as it stops me accidentally applying the poem to my life. If I didn't know the poems history before I read it, I would probably find some part of myself there.

Keep 'em coming

  • Nov 14, 2005

saiyukifan

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GOMENASAI EVERYONE. :(

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wow! this explains everything i feel... I guess...

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Sunlight is what I want, but sunlight ignores me... I wish I would someday be freed from this darkness by someone who will love me forever and ever... no more pain at all with him... no more pain and tears... because I will love him...
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DarkSavior

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It's good even get better I think ^_^' not sure what movie you are talking about. Sounds cool though...

I'd rather be hated for who I am rather than loved for who I pretend to be...

  • Nov 14, 2005

StevOmaru

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The Killing Perfection

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Its not too bad of a poem, it is very cold and mysterious and that gives it a cool twist.
good job, thnx 4 sharing

"I'll kill him eventually...but at the moment...for someone who doesn't realize anything at all, killing him has no value." Sesshoumaru Sama

kotako

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Sapphire of the Azure Sky

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Wah, so dark....scary...but cool..

  • Nov 18, 2005
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erm...I decided to make a story out of this in poem form (about past, present and future)..lol XD
yup, here's more rantings of a physco..trying to escape out of the asluym XP


Fearless.Physcotic.Mind

Radar of silence through the white halls,
the sense of fear long nulled,
As the longivity of the time calls,
the lost hero in me fled,

No longer the one sole protector,
everyone, everything....I have misjudged,
Lies and false identities were a mere factor,
regrets all emotions I touched,

Arouse and dawning with new determination,
my fear is dying through the sands of time,
A new person is born tainted,
my past forgotten, the voices remained...

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nolove

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better forget me ...

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yay, nice poem ^_^........cool, I love thiz style :D

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j0n0

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Increadibly Cute

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Nice, I don't know why you added soo many extra periods............I'm just guessing it is suppose to be a really long pause in the scenery on the poem.

An eye for an eye brings justice, but it is compassion that changes a man.

Another point of view doesn't necessarily make yours more or less right.

  • Nov 20, 2005

DarkSavior

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hey! This sound pretty dam cool... and periods are cool ^_^ except for the one women gets *just playing* anyway, you getting better at this so may be it's better to make a topic just about your poem as well... Just so you can show your work under one thread... Just a thought ^_^'

I'd rather be hated for who I am rather than loved for who I pretend to be...

  • Nov 21, 2005

xluminax

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Honto ni? Sou ka...

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Muah.
I love it. ^^

  • Nov 22, 2005
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lol...this time I'm writing about the physco's past before she's gone crazy..she used to be of someone important and her changes has made a great impact towards history. XP

My.Way.Your.Destiny (Twinsoul)

Breezing through the city lights,
rushing towards every corner ,
I am always wanted for fights,
with those forever made sinner,

Clashing with destiny, I was called,
a false identity forged and made,
With passion my enemies were stalled,
Victory was fast at my hand....

Till I come expecting perfect bliss,
the undenial betrayal of my accursed twin,
Turned the souls against my good cause,
fought my way through his sins,

Falling closer and deeper to the demon's wrath,
With a crest I ripped myself to pieces,
I made my vow to remain in vengeance,
my rebirth was hidden by my twin's ignorance......

Our deaths predicted...my destiny was forged,
my craze was just a mask,
Waiting behind...this shadowed reality,
was the unfinished yet unforgotten task.....

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Devildude

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again...bears a resemblance to the reaver on who he will become, very interesting, but i doesn;t really rhyme, more like it tells a real intense person's story, very good.
perhaps again, just what i was looking for...

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Sierra04

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My heart belongs to him..Erik...

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nice and dark poem..i like and love this kind of poem so keep it up okay...teehee....^_^

about microtokyo...sometimes it's quite emoty but, it's fun posting there

  • Nov 23, 2005

DarkSavior

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Hey! I like this one alot ^^, I think it's one of my fav from you poem side (I have a few). Has a nice flow to it... You have a way with words so keep it up. Thanks for sharing it...

I'd rather be hated for who I am rather than loved for who I pretend to be...

  • Nov 23, 2005

KuchikixRukia

KuchikixRukia

Death God Rukia

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i like it soo much...
really cool

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yeah, you rock good job! i like it alot your very talented

  • Nov 24, 2005

Rikkablurhound

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*Kero~! O_o

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Good, better.... ^^
Keep it Up... XD
tell me when you're famous... ^^

kusco

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Nice ? Me ? What a joke

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Not bad, I don't have a poet's soul to fully enjoy your work but you have some talents.
Especially the "past" part.

Bye everyone. I left Minitokyo.
Hope to see you soon.

  • Nov 24, 2005

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