WTF?! This poem almost seems like an excessive ranting. The rhythm is all screwy. I know you can do a hell of lot better than this. But I do love the large use of symbolisms even though i don't understand all of them.
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An eye for an eye brings justice, but it is compassion that changes a man.
Another point of view doesn't necessarily make yours more or less right.
- Nov 25, 2005
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erm..this time she's back to the present now..I don't expect you to understand this poem as it's coming from the physco's mind LOL
The Bonds Of Light And Dark
Haunted..with scars beyond cure,
as the shadows of undefined one walks,
Through nights and days so rare,
fleeting with pain; guilted by faults,The unknown lost in the hidden face,
as the truth remains untold,
Buried with hideousness; the increasingly disturbed pace,
finally found the strength to stand up as lies unfold,With determination so strong I fought,
through the steely bars maimed with force,
Attacks the guards without getting caught,
I am free; now fleeing through the darkest with a torch,Passing through every single light,
feeling the power once again to fight back,
I found the way throughout my flight,
as the pure in me guided the cursed back...
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amazing! love it! dark. and cool! ^^
- Dec 04, 2005
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another addition to the series of such darkness...ow...if only my fan fic can follow suit, it sounds so deep now. (my fan fic is on hold until at least after christmas) and this one lokks deep into the person described. and yeah, once again, i am impressed.
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- Dec 04, 2005
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Nice poems :P if you want to see mine you can find it from my forum posts :)
- Dec 04, 2005
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I feel insulted, what do you mean I won't understand it. It makes perfect sence, it's just a hell of a lot of symbolism (which by the way, good job). Wait...this is a physco's mind...F%*$ im a physco, I just have to shot myself in the foot for the 573 (and half) time. Well enough about me and my feelings,... that just sounds sooo weird. Ok, the poem is well written, unlike your previous ones that I can remember, this ones lines are more connected with the thought than the rhythm. Which I normally would reframe from, but your large amount of symbolism and the consistent imagery is what this poem good. By the way, who or what is the torch or should i say "pure in me"?
An eye for an eye brings justice, but it is compassion that changes a man.
Another point of view doesn't necessarily make yours more or less right.
- Dec 05, 2005
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Cool poem. Sounds so scary and depressing.
I love the way you wrote it in a first person point of view.
Very descriptive with the emotions. Sounds very lonely and horrifying.
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- Dec 05, 2005
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Dam! Most of your poem consist of being dark and running a muck "lol" not that it's bad, it's real good... but I just want to see a different side beside the chicken poem and the dark ones. Well, I guess it's always good to write something you know so keep it up and thanks for sharing it with us...
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