{POEM} The.TWO-SIDED.Coin

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ok...ok..guys..before life devours me..I'm gonna give a go at this 'religious' poem...so..give meh ur comments...

The face within a Man broke into two,
The Holy One shines upon us yet...
I now believe in the Forgotten One,
But it doesn't mean I'm your fool....

You may have my belief....
...but you do not have my thrust,
where all your shadows and lies deceive,
till the very core of Man's heart,

I turned towards the other side,
where hope and faith has not yet died,
and look to the other filled with cries....
I do not want that path to be mine....

Embracing you means a certain death,
I'll rather walk the Holy One's wrath,
where Man stopped being sinners,
And the divine emerged as winners....

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You must really like poems......
So which religion is it?
And wuzzup with the "before life devours me" part?
Nice poem but I am not really getting the poem ^_^'
Why am I the only one always not understanding poems?

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Devildude

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sounds great, is it Christian, or Jew? it sort of mentioned a forbidden worship, kinda nice, i know i would be like that.
Kind of like saying that Man is foolish.

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Jessenia

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what a great poem I like it. did you made it up ? you must like poem thank for send it me see yah

  • Jan 13, 2006

leosama84

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nice...its as if you met someone with another religion, that seems a bit dangerous to you...
i'm curious too, what religion are you?
i'm a muslim....when you talk about religious stuff, i pay attention ^_^....and no...i'm not like those....-NO THIS IS A SIN, DON'T DO THAT- kind of a guy :nya:

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Sierra04

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nice one friend ^^ it's a very nice poem you have keep it up ^^

  • Jan 13, 2006

angel-type

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hmm.....what r u?
i like the poem but kinda confusing.

  • Jan 14, 2006

sukumei

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you have touched the heart (or soul) of a religious man mikilyo. YIPPE. Nice one meldanya! (donr ask me what this means)

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  • Jan 14, 2006
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Ah..poetry. All is good...but this is great! Good job friend. :)

  • Jan 14, 2006

KitClairvoyance

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O.o ... this is good in a meaningful way.. ^^.. Like the contrast you put between the two opposing sides of man.. and the ultimate fate of both paths..

Raidemon666

lord of the lazy

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hahaha, beautiful poem, a poem of beliefs.......great job

  • Jan 14, 2006

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How u thought of writing that poem ><? awesome

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Aeegg, I like the use of symbolism and know that you has to deal with two oppisites (satan and God). So that narrows it down to 3 possible religions; most likely christianity. But i will warn you, go slow and steady otherwise you fail to realize, how far one falls when the eyes are looking at the prize.

P.S. I think you meant "trust" not "thrust" in the second stanza 2nd line. It would make a lot more sense.

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Another point of view doesn't necessarily make yours more or less right.

  • Jan 18, 2006

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