Fly as One { poem}

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BlkLotus

BlkLotus

bara tsukiyo

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Alone in a dark room
the only sound is a soft low song repeating

My heart beating to the slow rythem
my breath just as slow
eyes closed and arms to my side
as my soul fights to be free

wanting to soar high
above the clouds among the birds
wishing i could spread my wings
and fly as one with them

after along wait here is another poem for those who read them :)

hope you enjoy and critique if you want

chisaikame

chisaikame

happy camper o^^o

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oh i like how the image seem to be contrasting from something very dark and lonely... to an image of hope and freedom.. pretty cool! sugoi! XD

ego vici mundum

  • Mar 04, 2006

WolfMaster

WolfMaster

The Hunter

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very nice

  • Mar 04, 2006

j0n0

j0n0

Increadibly Cute

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Yay, another poem...lol. I must say, I completely understand the feeling you are trying to portray, hopefully. Your are tired of doing the same old thing and want to do something different and exciting. That something different is what makes you feel alive and liberated. Good poem :)

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  • Mar 04, 2006
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hmm...my brainfreeze is disappearing lol...simple poem yet feeling the depth at the same time :)

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sukumei

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Running A Critiquing Service

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yeah she has that skill dman pro... XD
anyway you triggered a memory! uh... go to english.flyff.com i think and yeah. Here you have a cute online Game a bit like the WOW you love....

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  • Mar 05, 2006

JadeTigress

JadeTigress

kawaii dorei

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good one sis hope you do more

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  • Mar 06, 2006

DoubleBarrel

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Banisher of Spam

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Wow such splendid talent.*starts to cry*This poem is so beautiful :D.
cant wait to the next one. :)

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  • Mar 06, 2006

Rikimaru-jp

Rikimaru-jp

Katon Karyu Endan

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It's been a while since your last poem :) at last you made one ;)
I find it really nice and the expressions are great!
keep it up!

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cloud-sama

cloud-sama

The Dark Lord

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wonderful beautful i love it your such a grate poet. i wish i was as good a poet as you but i lack creative vision o well nice poem :)

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  • Mar 07, 2006

AC2N

AC2N

Assez de haine...

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you keep the power of mind in you honey...
as usual it is a nice poem...
congrats !
love

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wolfling

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otonashii okami

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very imaginative . please do more

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  • Mar 15, 2006
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It's a nice poem. And you have heard most everything else I can say, so I won't be taking anymore of your time.

Kayen

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Lord of Nothing

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ummm.... wow

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You must see death to find life, you must look into evil to find the good
and to see the daylight you must walk through the darkness

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  • Apr 07, 2006

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