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It's been a long time since I've created a thread..it took me a while to find the button ^_^' yeah,yeah..stop smirking. Basically, I created a poem again..with the intention of unfreezing my brainfreeze and...this is inspired by underworld <_<

The mind....burning like fire,
Blood seeping....like cold ice,
senses....prickling through the veins,
Feeling all the throat-killing pain,

Scars halt from reforming...
Unhealed, the venom bursted out....screaming,
the inner soul crushing in replace...
leaving in something hollow on the face...

Venom...running all over the tears of blood,
getting deeper and deeper...the final cut,
LOST....is the memory of the last sin,
thick and hot....the venom kept rushing in...

Burning the chalked skin...leaving it charred,
slashes of sensation...leaving the mind scarred,
The world....STOPPED....to see,
the tortured monstrosity at last.....free.

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sounds more like a song actually, nicely done.
I can feel emo...sort off...

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You shouldn't talk about how cum in your like that. It's supposed to be a beautiful thing. LOL
Obviously I'm too tired, not enough sleep, I'll come back later.

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  • Mar 05, 2006

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It's so full of pain but I love it! I dont know why, but it reminds me of Shingetsutan Tsukihime :)

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  • Mar 06, 2006

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That explains why I can't find an overall theme, it based on two completely different things, brainfreeze and underworld. :D So the only thing this poem is missing is an overall theme; otherwise, great imagery and metaphores.

An eye for an eye brings justice, but it is compassion that changes a man.

Another point of view doesn't necessarily make yours more or less right.

  • Mar 06, 2006

happygreendragonfly

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Very vivid.

  • Mar 06, 2006
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i likes it like always love your verbage :)

  • Mar 12, 2006

BlkLotus

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this is good... i like the dark picture it evokes in my mind. sadness and final release ( my opinion at least)

thank you for posting this one :)

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Very poetic, I can't wait to see anouther one. Sorry for the late post.

  • Mar 23, 2006

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