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This is a poem i had to do as a final assignment in my Language Arts class and I decided to submit it here for all to see.

I'm not sure how good it is but I got a B on it in class so...enjoy and please comment. Good or bad comments are welcome.


Life
.:By Richard Duffield:.

Life is living,
In this earth we all love.

Life is when,
You came from up above.

And then God sent you,
Back down to the earth,
And that is when you were given birth.

As you grew,
You made more friends.

You are loved,
And your family defends,
You from the dangers,
Outside in life,
Then you are married,
With a husband or wife.

Time flew so fast,
Like you were born yesterday.

Please, live a good life,
That I must say.

Then you're a senior,
You're close to your death.

Say your good-bye to the world,
And take your last breath.

Soon you are dead,
And for all those who cared,
They came to your funeral,
And it was declared.

Once again,
I have to say,
Life is living,
In this earth the right way.

And thats it, I hope it was worth your time... ^_^'

Inuyasha-FAN

Inuyasha-FAN

I'm back

Goodjob! That was really good! :)

it's worth reading but there's some poetic flava missing...maybe u got a b cos of a bit of english mistakes? but it's very good :)

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It's great!
Really! :D
It's about a very true subject...
we will all live and die.

Music is in your eyes.
Music is in your soul.
Music is surrounding, everywhere you see.
Music is a reflection of who we wish to be.

inuyashalove04

inuyashalove04

inuai-chan

It is a good poem. I remember doing something simular in an English class...but I didn't do so great. (actually I failed BIG time) ^_^'
But, yours is good. Thanks for sharing!

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"I personally believe that each of us was put here for a purpose-- to build not to destroy. If I can make people smile, then I have served my purpose for God." - Red Skelton

Thank you all for commenting on my poem. You have inspired me to try to try to make anouther some day.
~Richard~

Heh, as a poet myself, I would say...
Your poem is well-written.
It had a rhyme scheme in it.
And overall, it's very good and it had a meaning.
Life and Death.
As much as I can say, Richard....
You may be think of being a poet.
Then, again, this is your decision.
Your choice and your life.
So, please, do what your heart desires and therefore, you'll know the true meaning of happiness. ^-^
Well, that is all I have to say.
I can't wait to read another of your poems. ^-^
Later! *smile*

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animefairy

animefairy

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This is a very good poem, but it wouldn't be the best! XD Good job! At least you do poems better than me! XD

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