Hey, I'm randomly browsing MT, so...... ^_^;;
But, I think... The main issue with this is the fact that you've done outlines [with the characters, and the arch], and
then you've put a background that doesn't have outlines... So it looks really weird... And you've cell-shaded the
characters, while soft-shading the background... O_o Looks odd...
Also, your "softening" of things looks like you've just gone through with smudge or blur and killed the entire
background... I liked the original better... >_>
I've also got a bit of an issue with your symmetrical background, especially when you've put the characters
off-center... And you've got a set of twins juxtaposed around the main character...! Now, *that* just screams for
symmetry...
Generally, I don't like the textures... [Ack, some person said they liked them...? *hacking cough*] Well, to me, they
seem unnatural... Especially since it looks so uniform... There should be more variation in your textures, if you want
them to work better, and I think you should change the colours... >_<! The characters look like they're just
plonked there, instead of fitting with the background... Maybe have orange or purple roses! XD! [Is that really the
colour of their uniform? Ack...] Oh, and the emblem colour changed...? Like, the emblem on their blazers don't match the
colour of the emblem on the arch... @_@;;
And uhm, the perspective of the arch seems a bit off... *struggles to explain how to fix it...* >_<! The horizon
line should be at their eye-level, so the vanishing point should be somewhere near their eye-level, and the arch's
perspective has a vanishing point that's too low... >_> Hope that makes sense! [If it doesn't, PM me or something,
and I'll send you a pictoral explanation...]
And also, this isn't a criticism, but is the fountain meant to be elliptical? 'cause it looks that way, that's all...
[We have an elliptical fountain on campus! It's cute, but someone messed up the statue inside XD]
... Anyway, hope that helps! ^_^ [Sorry if I sound evil... =S]