[Poem] Your heart, your eye, your lies, your death

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Your heart, your eye, your lies, your death

You say you know,
I say you don't.
You show you do,
But I retaliate with my thoughts.

You say the light is good,
That's what your heart says.
I say everything is a lie,
No matter what you say or do.

You come, I go, that is the law.
Truth and lies are hand to hand.
Until you're eyes tear them.
It's what makes us what.

My eyes, your eyes,
This is not what we see.
See beyond the false, the truth,
See your heart, where corruption begins.
There's my darkness the one unfilled with joy.

I'm dark you're light...
You created me.
But still, you don't know why I'm here.
I'm here to balance your insanity.

There is no tranquil feeling,
If you don't show yourself to it.
Because of this, you are driven to the edge,
Where your heart will break.
Never to be seen and never to see.

I've submitted this to www.poeticpower.com (subtract a few lines because of the line limit) and I've got it published. Now... I just want to see other people's opinions and ratings.

Please rate 1-10 and give any comments
1 as in horrible
10 as in great

Also, try finding the meaning of this. I want to see how other people interpret this poem.

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  • Sep 08, 2006
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10
great poem dude...i like it a lot...really! Good Job!

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I would say 8.
One question that i think answers the \"how i interpret that\" question.
For how long are you gonna be in the middle?

  • Feb 22, 2007
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7.5......
Finally, a poem that doesn't rhyme....
Although rhyming poems aren't that bad, I totally prefer not rhyming poems.....

Nice but.... I don't know..... maybe it needs more passion

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