Broken Promises [poem]

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BlkLotus

BlkLotus

bara tsukiyo

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You promised to take care of me
and love me always
thru thick and thin
sickness and health

You told me of your love for me
and how i was your "Pretty Lady"
and now i'm not even that

You used to look at me with love and a fiery passion
You would never dare to treat me bad
now all i get is disdain and no respect

You never used to lie to me
or try to cover things up
now all i get are white lies
and shifty looks

I used to think
all I needed was you
but now my heart is broken
and my spirit too


dedicated to a friend that is going thru hard times
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chisaikame

chisaikame

happy camper o^^o

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lovely..- such raw/deep seated emotions emit in your poems, Lotus-san! .____. subarashi. (excellent!) :)

ego vici mundum

  • Sep 23, 2006

animefreak3

animefreak3

Serpentarius

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such is life, to all things there is an end...

We begin and end in nothingness. Our darkness is confronting our ultimate nature, for nothing can come from nothing. We must sow the wind and reap the void, since the now is all we have. Together, we walk in darkness.

  • Sep 23, 2006

WolfMaster

WolfMaster

The Hunter

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very well done, I know who your talking about, and please give her My pet and let her know I am here for her as well

  • Sep 23, 2006

anime-xp

anime-xp

random anime

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you done a very good job on that poem keep up the cool poems

Shoku

Shoku

Looking for past friends

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MysteryAngel is not here to comment on your poems anymore. T_T

AC2N

AC2N

Assez de haine...

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wow...
what a sad sad feeling... it's really sad to have this sort of think...
Hope I will never have once... even if I ever had (T_T)
*kiss*

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j0n0

j0n0

Increadibly Cute

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Those are some hard times. I wish your friend some better luck on finding her true love.

As for the poem, it sounds like someone rambling on about this and that. The rhythm is all broken. Considering what the poem is about, that is how someone would sound if they were breaking up and wondered why. So good job :)

An eye for an eye brings justice, but it is compassion that changes a man.

Another point of view doesn't necessarily make yours more or less right.

  • Sep 27, 2006

Kayen

Kayen

Lord of Nothing

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WM filled me in, and very good poem

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You must see death to find life, you must look into evil to find the good
and to see the daylight you must walk through the darkness

thank you AC2N for the awsome av and sig :)

  • Oct 04, 2006
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That was not a bad poem,I write poems too.Your has a lot of love in it.

  • Oct 05, 2006

JadeTigress

JadeTigress

kawaii dorei

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wow sad :(
hope your friend is ok

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  • Oct 05, 2006

Sierra04

Sierra04

My heart belongs to him..Erik...

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somehow i can relate with this poem....i've been going thru ths also...and nice poem btw ^^

  • Dec 14, 2006

midnightLOVERS

midnightLOVERS

.:THE QUEEN OF HEARTS:.

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aw that so sweet of you to dedicate that to a friend of yours. your freind is lucky to have a person like you around. judging from the poem and the dedication you must be a really caring person ^.^
that a really amazing poem thoug it be about a painful topic. but i can relate

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