[POEM] So Long......

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BlkLotus

BlkLotus

bara tsukiyo

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a painful memory
is all you are to me

You used to brighten my day
but now you chase the sun away

my once happy heart
now a pit of despair
whenever your name is mentioned
or you appear

no longer what we used to be
sweet and free
just two people doomed for eternity

never to speak, smile or touch
his grasp on you is too much
he is between us
now i lack your friendship and trust

wasnt really sure what to title this. there is a story behind this but i think you all can figure it out.

comment if you wish

Alden

Alden

Lose the Pride.

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Nice poem.

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  • Nov 11, 2006

WolfMaster

WolfMaster

The Hunter

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very well done I can almost feel the pain

  • Nov 11, 2006

chisaikame

chisaikame

happy camper o^^o

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i don't know how to explain this but it is beautiful. you capture emotions so well. :D

ego vici mundum

  • Nov 12, 2006

Kayen

Kayen

Lord of Nothing

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um....wow

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You must see death to find life, you must look into evil to find the good
and to see the daylight you must walk through the darkness

thank you AC2N for the awsome av and sig :)

  • Nov 12, 2006

Lionhearted911

Lionhearted911

~:. LioNe$s .:~

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wow?! understatement...it is nice...and sad...yep you do capture emotions effectively...very nice...
not sure what inspired that...but...umm..keep it up?
good luck, thanks for sharing!

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  • Nov 12, 2006
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good!very good!*claps hands*^^
it wuz getting good and when it came to "wasn't realli sure.....*i almost thought that wuz the poem cuz i didn't want it to end XD

  • Nov 13, 2006
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Sounds very lonely and emotional....
Nice poem although I'm kinda confused what the theme is

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wow... astounding poem Ms. Lotus! you do know how to show the situation clearly... I do feel sorry for the whole situation... it has happened to me too, obviouly with certain varibles... and it is not a nice situation...

  • Nov 16, 2006

jasaiyajin

jasaiyajin

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this poem is broken... much like something else inside(we know what that is)... maybe it's too straight to the point, or im an ass...

however the msg is clear, it's over and a hole is left... for humans, we're freakin weird... arent we.!? nee...

I think poetry is a way of expressing ourselves to others in hopes that someone will take a DEEPER look into the meaning and decypher the code, then it looks like more time was taken to appreciate the cover up... i dunno, it still an art that's boundless by itself...

tc bik..

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  • Nov 16, 2006

AngelXXX

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Yaoi Lover

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Nicely written.

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Invincible

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Angel and Sierras Guardian

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Sure is a sad poem.Hope the pain stops and you begin to write happy poems.

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Never fight with the Invincible

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Very nice emotional poem 10

  • Nov 23, 2006

AC2N

AC2N

Assez de haine...

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this is a nice poem...
I Hope that you are happy in your life and this is not your real feeling.
Kiss you sweetly...
Frenchy C.

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....hmmmm.....nice poem....sad....usually people write poems to express their feelings, i hope it's not the same case with you....i mean, for me, when i write a poem, the message being conveyed are my feelings....hmmm...i just hope it's not the same case with you.....anyways.....it still is a nice poem.....

  • Nov 23, 2006

JusticePro

JusticePro

Knight Of Justice

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ouch~are you ok?cause that is 1 sad poem...but its a good though...

War is not some game to play the hero. Stop making decisions to please yourself. If you have all this power, take responsibility for it
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  • Nov 23, 2006

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