*poem* that night

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Inuyasha-FAN

Inuyasha-FAN

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It was the first time
we saw each other
for years
i waited for you
since that day
we made plans
for one night
to have the night
together
you told me you loved me
you told me you cared
on that night
I was all ready
I wanted to see you so bad
I waited for an hour
you didnt come
I went home heartbroken,
and then two days later
someone told me
they saw you, that night
with another guy
and the thing that got me the most,
it was my best friend.

That came to me somehow. Tell me what you think of it.

  • Aug 27, 2007

Sulibres

Sulibres

Avert your eyes from the truth.

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Well. Let's put it this way, it's realistic enough to happen in reality. But it feels like it lacks a kind of...poetic emotion that seems to flow smoothly whenever there is a kind of harmony between the words.

I really think it's a bit rough and that you've done better before.

  • Aug 27, 2007

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yeah doesnt surprise me, I can't get that back.

  • Aug 27, 2007

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