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Hey, I'd like to get some feedback on this before submission.
http://img200.imageshack.us/img200/9937/ayaskyu.jpg
I was debating whether adding snow, just because the original was a snowy landscape and it'd be a nice aesthetic feature, but i feel like it'd be too cluttered then. i'll probably also give the clouds another look because they seem too muddled right now.
hmm.. you might want to remove the cyan line in there. I think you're kinda making a horizon to separate the sky
from the ground, but hat's not needed.
The butterflies looked odd, like they were unnaturally just placed there. It kinda disrupts the nice clouds.
Try making some mountains and upped the clouds a bit.
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i can see its a kannon wp, but, it just seems too simple, you are doing good by not adding any text...
but maybe if you aded something more, and make ayu bigger, how about adding some of her favorite foods?
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I disagree with srsn that you remove the cyan line, I think the girl is running on water... I think its a nice effect, though it glows too much, just decrease its glow a little so it would be a nice clean one...
for the butterflies, they seem quite odd for their sizes, they look too big and does not fit with the distance of the girl from the wall itself... since the girl is far, the butterflies should be smaller to indicate distance, unless the girl is more far than the butterflies.... I suggest you replace it with birds instead, but butterflies are nice too
add a few more clouda in the sky, or maybe you can add an airplane (with smoke) just for touch... or maybe you can doo clouds that are in shape of her favorite things (though I think its going to ruin everything! XD.... )
since its quite scenic, go to srsn's advice of putting some mountains... if you want it to be a little modern, then you can go for buildings/houses
the water is quite weird, there are circles (that indicates a drop of water) but they don't have a drop and it would seem really weird... I suggest you remove them, unless you're going for a "rain about to start" theme for a wall...
that's all I can say, hope I helped ^^
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thanks for the comments! I agreed that the butterflies seemed a little invasive after taking a second look, so I removed them for now. I also got rid of the ripples and redid some of the clouds.I still have to smooth out the clouds out though.
http://img202.imageshack.us/img202/7131/skywall3.jpg
I also decided to take josephine and shavo's advice with a taiyaki cloud. I'm still undecided on whether it fits in or not.
http://img263.imageshack.us/img263/4186/skywall4.jpg
EDIT: I realized that I made the reflections weaker in the process somehow and screwed up the horizon line...will get on that in the next revise.
I now find the wallpaper cute ^^
I especially like the skywall4. When I meant to remove the cyan horizon, I didn't mean to remove it entirely. I mean to just make it weaker or softer like the one you already have in the skywall4.
I think adding some pink/purple shades on the upper part of the sky (just like the one you had on the first link) would give life and color to the all-too-plain and white sky you have right now. because it kinda hurts the eye the way it is now.
Make the taiyaki clouds more visible or stronger coz as it is, it's kinda randomized.
http://img684.imageshack.us/img684/4316/skywall5.jpg
smoothed out some of the clouds. added a little deeper color to the wall so that it's not so bright. Made the taiyaki cloud more noticeable. Made some adjustments to the glow line and deepened the reflection slightly. I didn't realize how bright and light my wall was becoming until i looked at my first version xD. also flipped it horizontally because icons are usually in the way.
Hmmm either way (Ayu's position) is fine... I now find the watter to plain. It's like ice. If that's gonna be the case, add snow flakes instead of snow.
http://img233.imageshack.us/img233/1247/skywall6.jpg
made the color more vibrant and added some snow.
Hmmm.... the snow is not that visible. and looked like bubbles instead of snow. Add snowflakes instead and make them somewhat light cyan so that it would be seen. Coz making them white kinda blends with the sky.
well its a great idea however to me it seems to plain... i might add a lil background in behind the pond just because it feels like it is to linear. but thats me
http://img146.imageshack.us/img146/5780/skywall7.jpg
i decided against snowflakes because snowflakes take up too much of the focal of the wallpaper and they look out of place due to their complexity. however, I may add more clearer snow later just to make it not seem so empty. originally, i used white because light cyan does not show up against a blue background like this well. the wallpaper also seemed a little simple to me, so i placed some more clouds to make the background more dynamic. i also adjusted the colors again slightly.
http://img189.imageshack.us/img189/5780/skywall7.jpg
originally, my idea for the wallpaper was to have a clear reflection like above. however, because I wanted a cooler environment (literally lol) i added more white for frost and decreased the reflections. but as most people's comments say that wall looks a little plain, im wondering if i should go back to this sort of reflection (of course, not as clear and in-the-face as in the above example).
You might want to lower the opacity of the reflected clouds. The opacity is somewhere between the first version and the second version of your last post.
http://img84.imageshack.us/img84/7620/skywall9.jpg
added more snow and adjusted the reflection slightly. i think this will more or less constitute the final version, so any last-minute adjustments i should make?
EDIT: noted some gunk at the top and elsewhere on the wall. will get rid of those in the final.
better already ^^
alright finished (for now)! thanks for all the advice, especially you srsn.
you're welcome ^^ already commented on your wallpaper ^^
Taiyaki Snow by darkangelcrisis
Wallpaper in gallery already.
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