Hey every one......hope you dont mind......heres the rules.....you must
decide.....My job write a few..... with puzzles....woundering.....theres
clifhanging too.....so come along come inside.....But hold on for the bumppy
ride........I should come up with every day....
or try.....lol..feel free to add your own i dont mind.... this should be
fun*wink*
heres my first poem...feel free to tell me what you think
Its called "wait":
I am patently waiting. Until I cant wait no more
But if I keep waiting . Im not really sure, Upon what I await
But I just sit upon a great big mountain full of waits
Until the time is finally right,so I can take my wantings
Its just wait
Should I beg,on my knees,or cry like a dog.
Curl up in some corner,or in a hole? Till you finally make up your mind?
No.I think not.I should just.Wait
Even though the anger is building up inside of me
I must say that it is hard.to swallow.down my pride
I have to say that this is a very interesting piece... I am rarely intrigued by
writing, but this is very interesting. I like the form of the poem, as in, I
like that it doesn't all rhyme. It was harder to read because of the
exclamations (if you go back after copying and pasting and add in the ' "
etc. yourself then it won't do that. But I really do like the piece and I hope
to see more.
Quote by sjolleyI have to say that this
is a very interesting piece... I am rarely intrigued by writing, but this is
very interesting. I like the form of the poem, as in, I like that it doesn't
all rhyme. It was harder to read because of the exclamations (if you go back
after copying and pasting and add in the ' " etc. yourself then it won't
do that. But I really do like the piece and I hope to see more.
oh of course.....*shaking head* i'll be writing more......i love to write
poems......one way to get off fustration...lol....*smile*.....i'm just glad
everyone enjoys...
Quote by sjolleyI have to say that this
is a very interesting piece... I am rarely intrigued by writing, but this is
very interesting. I like the form of the poem, as in, I like that it doesn't
all rhyme. It was harder to read because of the exclamations (if you go back
after copying and pasting and add in the ' " etc. yourself then it won't
do that. But I really do like the piece and I hope to see more.
oh of course.....*shaking head* i'll be writing more......i love to write
poems......one way to get off fustration...lol....*smile*.....i'm just glad
everyone enjoys...
I love writing too. lol It's my hobbie and it's part of my job. (editor and
critiquor). I'm a very picky person when it comes to writing, so it's a
compliment if I say anything about someones work *blushes* I'm sorry if that
sounded mean.... lol
Well thanks.....AHEM......ATTENION...ALL twodays lucky a day.....For poem # 2 is
now on the way.......
.....please ENJOY*bows*
this one is called.....:"KID"......
You say what you mean; you mean what you say
Why did you say it would be that way?
You lied to me, but you didnt break my heart
I have to leave you alone, youre tearing me apart
Youre bitter like poison, cold as ice
You pricked my tongue with just one bite
Too many words,cant say how I feel
You pretend to comfort me, youre so unreal
I called out for you,you walked away
I just stand and watched you with nothing to say
And here I stay,believing in you
I cant believe what you tried to pull, the shit that you do
And then expect me not to be mad
You was part of my world in mind,turned out to be the worse part I had
Before, I seen you speak,
And to chase around other girls,am I a trick or treat?
Tried to be your friend, but you just walked away
Tried to make you mine, but here I stay
Alone, by myself, to try and wonder Why?
That time after time, I even try to try
To make it work,between you me
But I guess youre just another one that Wont be the 'One' for me
So just leave me alone, and when you see me
Just dont bother talking,like accustom,just let me be
Dont even try to deny,you know what you did
You will always and forever,be just some 'Kid'
this second one I like too... the way U express Urself.
Ur really good at this, and one of the things that I can say that attracts my
atention, is the way U mix the rimes, just few here and there, swee
I liked it better that yesterdays, keep it up.
*lights a cigarrete*
till tomorrow ^_^
Quote by SaschaCthis second one I like
too... the way U express Urself.
Ur really good at this, and one of the things that I can say that attracts my
atention, is the way U mix the rimes, just few here and there, swee
I liked it better that yesterdays, keep it up.*lights a cigarrete*
till tomorrow ^_^
Quote by AlishaDezi your great at writing
poems. I'm sure peom after poem they'll all be great.
why....THANK YOU...Alisha......I am always glad to share....and dont be afraid
to post some of your work or not......feel free to express yourself.....in my
world......lol....;)
i am glad everyone enjoys...just meet back here for the meet poem.....untill
tomorrow...friends......
Hey every one......hope you dont mind......heres the rules.....you must decide.....My job write a few..... with puzzles....woundering.....theres clifhanging too.....so come along come inside.....But hold on for the bumppy ride........I should come up with every day....
or try.....lol..feel free to add your own i dont mind.... this should be fun*wink*
heres my first poem...feel free to tell me what you think
Its called "wait":
I am patently waiting. Until I cant wait no more
But if I keep waiting . Im not really sure, Upon what I await
But I just sit upon a great big mountain full of waits
Until the time is finally right,so I can take my wantings
Its just wait
Should I beg,on my knees,or cry like a dog.
Curl up in some corner,or in a hole? Till you finally make up your mind?
No.I think not.I should just.Wait
Even though the anger is building up inside of me
I must say that it is hard.to swallow.down my pride
To say what I truly feel deep down inside.
BUT.I.STILL.wait!
Nice poem.
*blushing* thank you.....it was nothing really
sounds romantic =)
Its so sweet. I love it.
could u make another poem, i would love to hear it.
Thanks.....both of you *smiles*
I have to say that this is a very interesting piece... I am rarely intrigued by writing, but this is very interesting. I like the form of the poem, as in, I like that it doesn't all rhyme. It was harder to read because of the exclamations (if you go back after copying and pasting and add in the ' " etc. yourself then it won't do that. But I really do like the piece and I hope to see more.
oh of course.....*shaking head* i'll be writing more......i love to write poems......one way to get off fustration...lol....*smile*.....i'm just glad everyone enjoys...
I love writing too. lol It's my hobbie and it's part of my job. (editor and critiquor). I'm a very picky person when it comes to writing, so it's a compliment if I say anything about someones work *blushes* I'm sorry if that sounded mean.... lol
lol/.......no worries......its all good...... ill still respect a mind......good or bad......its all good
Everyone feel free to show your work.......it no trouble at all.....lol
Uh... can't understand some parts but to see the ones I understand, I think it's really romantic, hehehe!
I'll wait!
pretty ^^
Sorry if you cant see....I'll try by best to fix it..... and by the way thanks for posting.....feel free to show me some of your work...
Thanks guys.......i'l write more......tomorrow....
its diferent to what I read till now... I kinda like Ur stile
I'll be back tomorrow
this should be fun ^_^
Wow...Thanks....it will be then everyone can diguess it.....point of views...I just glad everyone enjoys*laughing nurviously*
I thought no one would like it....lol....thanks though
:d
Love all poems includin this one^_^
Great job!
Well thanks.....AHEM......ATTENION...ALL twodays lucky a day.....For poem # 2 is now on the way.......
.....please ENJOY*bows*
this one is called.....:"KID"......
You say what you mean; you mean what you say
Why did you say it would be that way?
You lied to me, but you didnt break my heart
I have to leave you alone, youre tearing me apart
Youre bitter like poison, cold as ice
You pricked my tongue with just one bite
Too many words,cant say how I feel
You pretend to comfort me, youre so unreal
I called out for you,you walked away
I just stand and watched you with nothing to say
And here I stay,believing in you
I cant believe what you tried to pull, the shit that you do
And then expect me not to be mad
You was part of my world in mind,turned out to be the worse part I had
Before, I seen you speak,
And to chase around other girls,am I a trick or treat?
Tried to be your friend, but you just walked away
Tried to make you mine, but here I stay
Alone, by myself, to try and wonder Why?
That time after time, I even try to try
To make it work,between you me
But I guess youre just another one that Wont be the 'One' for me
So just leave me alone, and when you see me
Just dont bother talking,like accustom,just let me be
Dont even try to deny,you know what you did
You will always and forever,be just some 'Kid'
NICE
good poem dezi-channess good job eh you gots talent-o keep up the
poem writing ness i gots faith in your ability 
this second one I like too... the way U express Urself.
Ur really good at this, and one of the things that I can say that attracts my atention, is the way U mix the rimes, just few here and there, swee
I liked it better that yesterdays, keep it up.
*lights a cigarrete*
till tomorrow ^_^
*blushes....*....THANK you.......thank YOU...lol.....tomorrow shall come....
Thaks zero ......nice of you to drop by......Feel free to come back anytime....hehe.....
Dezi your great at writing poems.
I'm
sure peom after poem they'll all be great.
why....THANK YOU...Alisha......I am always glad to share....and dont be afraid to post some of your work or not......feel free to express yourself.....in my world......lol....;)
i am glad everyone enjoys...just meet back here for the meet poem.....untill tomorrow...friends......
wow excellent job
i luv it!
soo romantic
*pats dez on the back*