It's beautiful. You're talented, you know? I like those people who have writing
skills...maybe because I had always bad notes in Italian! But it wasn't my
fault, my Italian teacher hated me!
Wow!! Such a nice poem!! ^^ I never knew you write poems, too!! You got good
talent!! Hope you'll make more poems for us to see!! Keep up the good work!!
Your poem is like a meandering river,
the current doth not take heed,
similar to a snake sliver,
flowing like you decreed
Does not a river flow to a destination, and does not a river meander as
well?
Silent road, exiled by dark night. //the road of time?
Past gradually became cloudy
Your shadow is too apparent //what cast the shadow? GF?
Forced me to reply on you. //did you mean rely
Deep in my heart
I always felt the solitude -
Rain falls day after day //a deep sadness
Who is by your side
on the other side
of the city, //ref. to city, it misleading, but it symbolizes distance appart
Viewing this beautiful sky? //but i thought it was raining, the storm is
beautiful?
I'm standing on the Urban fringe //edge of city?
Only to find a picture by my side
Remotely, we look at the horizon
I need some time
For you to go farther,
I no longer miss you
I need some time
to dilute the memory,
because missing is a risk I can not take //the meander occurs here, a river
rift
As for the forever -
the existence of a picture
with fond memories
of sweet laughs,
is all I need
in my memories of you. //i can relate, but no picture ;(
Someone you love moved away, or floated appart from you, and there is/was
nothing you could do but grieve.
Poetry to me is not just a slap together one time session, I take my time to
figure out what connects ideas best and modify that necessary inconsistency in
every stanza that need be.
Thank you all for your advice!
Thats a great poem sketch,keep up the good work
its such a sad poem...but i love it...
thanks for sharing sketch
This is really well written, you have a good talent! Keep up the reat work!
Wow ... your poem is great!
thank you guys for taking your time to read my poem, appreciate it.
It's beautiful. You're talented, you know? I like those people who have writing skills...maybe because I had always bad notes in Italian! But it wasn't my fault, my Italian teacher hated me!
Wow!! Such a nice poem!! ^^ I never knew you write poems, too!! You got good talent!! Hope you'll make more poems for us to see!! Keep up the good work!!
Your poem is like a meandering river,
the current doth not take heed,
similar to a snake sliver,
flowing like you decreed
Does not a river flow to a destination, and does not a river meander as well?
Silent road, exiled by dark night. //the road of time?
Past gradually became cloudy
Your shadow is too apparent //what cast the shadow? GF?
Forced me to reply on you. //did you mean rely
Deep in my heart
I always felt the solitude -
Rain falls day after day //a deep sadness
Who is by your side
on the other side
of the city, //ref. to city, it misleading, but it symbolizes distance appart
Viewing this beautiful sky? //but i thought it was raining, the storm is beautiful?
I'm standing on the Urban fringe //edge of city?
Only to find a picture by my side
Remotely, we look at the horizon
I need some time
For you to go farther,
I no longer miss you
I need some time
to dilute the memory,
because missing is a risk I can not take //the meander occurs here, a river rift
As for the forever -
the existence of a picture
with fond memories
of sweet laughs,
is all I need
in my memories of you. //i can relate, but no picture ;(
Someone you love moved away, or floated appart from you, and there is/was nothing you could do but grieve.
Poetry to me is not just a slap together one time session, I take my time to figure out what connects ideas best and modify that necessary inconsistency in every stanza that need be.