Living a shattered existence, terrified.
Beyond a desolate world, terrorized.
Between the scattered stars, petrified.
Within a violent war, glorified?

-I want to add more sometime.

haikuuuuuuuu, it's an ok start, but ya, something is definitely not complete about your thoughts here. Too many eid's, maybe it's too generic that way. It's like the stuff in between the bread is missing in the sandwich.

Yeah I know what you mean. At first I liked the idea of all the ied's...but when it was finished it felt funny. Thanks for the advice.

i think that its a great poem! Who wrote it? Sounds really good

i think that its a great poem! Who wrote it? Sounds really good, has a nice flow

Thanks...I wrote it.

very strong hard words used,
not only that but does say alot for such a small poem

thx for sharin

Quote by jasaiyajinhaikuuuuuuuu, it's an ok start, but ya, something is definitely not complete about your thoughts here. Too many eid's, maybe it's too generic that way. It's like the stuff in between the bread is missing in the sandwich.

I agree...this makes no sense to me, sorry *picks behind jasaiyajin*