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I decided to make a little cute poem, (a.k.a. I'm flirting with girl) so I hope you guys can enjoy it. All comments/criticisms are wellcomed.

You smile,
You laugh,
Like a child
On a water slide.

But a mild irritation,
A slight deviation
And that pretty smile, vanishes
As if it were out of style.

But worry not
For the minor things
Have little strength
Compared to you.

So I beg you, Please!
Smile for us this day
And bring some small joy
To what can be, a delightful day.

enjoy

I want to burn my study book, I better pass the state exam for my license XD

This poem needs a picture, otherwise, it sux... ;p

Is that so wrong to not like a poem??? Is it?

this is a sweet poem i like it. keep up the good work

thanks you guys. A picture of what, a cute anime girl smilling? Hmm, that can work.

It's a good poem. Pictures would actually make it better. Not just one pic though. 4 would work.

Quote by FelixNekoPhoenixIt's a good poem. Pictures would actually make it better. Not just one pic though. 4 would work.


lol, one picture for each stanza. Unfortunately i don't know how to do that.

Quote by j0n0

Quote by FelixNekoPhoenixIt's a good poem. Pictures would actually make it better. Not just one pic though. 4 would work.


lol, one picture for each stanza. Unfortunately i don't know how to do that.

Well I have some pics in mind, but if I were to post the pics they would be FAR to big. Then there is the fact that they are from different animes.

Here comes Alisha to the rescue! *da da daa* Nice pome j0n0 it's really cute and sweet. Now as for the pic... *pulls it out and slaps it on the thread* Hope ya like it

http://img483.imageshack.us/img483/3244/minitokyofemalescanscarnelian2.th.jpg

Quote by AlishaHere comes Alisha to the rescue! *da da daa* Nice pome j0n0 it's really
cute and sweet. Now as for the pic... *pulls it out and slaps it on the
thread* Hope ya like it
http://img483.imageshack.us/img483/3244/minitokyofemalescanscarnelian2.th.jpg


ooooo, nice one, good poem j0n0, but fix the beat

Quote by AlishaHere comes Alisha to the rescue! *da da daa* Nice pome j0n0 it's really
cute and sweet. Now as for the pic... *pulls it out and slaps it on the
thread* Hope ya like it


lol, thx but shes not smilling, it doesn't make sense if she doesn't smile.

Aww cute poem! :)
i really like the ending! Great job!

Yeah the beat is off, i'd try it later, too tried and not motivated right now.

But she was smiling. Just not that big. :sweat: Then how about this one?

http://img465.imageshack.us/img465/2061/minitokyofemalescansyuihaga147.th.jpg

Although you were flirting with a girl, I, like most of the time, found other meanings. I thought of how much a difference a smile could make to the ones you don't appreciate that well and make them feel part of even though they might not be as close to you as others are. In sum I think less loved people deserve a little happiness from one no matter if that person ain't your favorite. Lol I think I over said it...hehe

Quote by AlishaBut she was smiling. Just not that big. :sweat: Then how about this
one?


This one is perfect, thx.

Quote by xangeAlthough you were flirting with a girl, I, like most of the time, found
other meanings. I thought of how much a difference a smile could make
to the ones you don't appreciate that well and make them feel part of
even though they might not be as close to you as others are. In sum I
think less loved people deserve a little happiness from one no matter
if that person ain't your favorite. Lol I think I over said it...hehe


Why am I not surprise

mmmmm, beautiful

aww, you are ten times ahead of me :P this reminds me of something nice back in the good days :)

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