My thoughts on my current life.
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The first thought of it
Appeared in my dream.
I could clearly see
That this was strange
Beautiful, yet, sad,
My life begins

Somethings strange,
I can't see
What's happenning
I can't breathe
It's so strange
I can't hear
Am I dead?
Because I can't feel.

I want to love
Envy filling me
I want to feel
Jealousy taking over
Making me wonder
Why am I alone?

Though I think,
I've just got it wrong
Perhaps it is so,
That I've got all I need here
I think all I want
Is for the disappearence of this fear

Will they leave me again
In the cold ground, dead
Will they betray me
As they've all said
Maybe I'm just paranoid
Or do they just want me gone.

I want the answers to my questions
Truth to break through my tension
I want to know,
Why have my life been so
In this place so wrong. . .
Hoping it is just a simple song.

Yeeeeeaaaaah, there is rhythm. Great start, not so good middle, but great finish. I would get rid of " Because I can't feel." in the second stanza because it is implide and doesn't add anything more to the poem. A big improvement over your last three.

Don't you find it odd that this was once called or is reffered to in the future as friendship?

Sounds like you are gonna die soon or something
Very.... moody