I Carry This Blood

I took a step forward,
I turned around and look,
My home behind and falling back,
This journey will take me to a far distance,
Knowing I will come back one day,
My heart softened.

I took another step forward,
Too late to turn around and look now,
I conquered mountains,
I dried the ocean,
I filled the sky,
I remembered home.

I took another step,
But I didn't go forward,
I fell into this pit,
I earned bruises,
I earned scars,
I lost blood,
I lost hope,
I lost faith,
I lost myself.

I took another step,
I'm coming home now,
My own blood received me,
As to what I am, a fully grown bird with wings,
I can spread my wings,
I can fly with my wings,
But I didn't,
My blood tied me to where I am now,
Home was the name given,

I took another step if I can,
Wondering, I shouldn't have come home after all,
Where my wings are tied,
Where my legs are tied,
Where I am tired,
Tired of being tied.

I took another step when it was time,
I went forward,
I opened the door and left,
I didn't turn back,
This, I venture and I won't come back,
I am leaving.... Finally.

I took another step forward,
Knowing I will come back one day,
My heart softened,
I must come back,
Because in my veins,
I carry this blood.

This is my first time making a poem, please make a remark for me

Awesome poem but I don't really understand the poem
So, is this poem about a bird's journey?

dude...don't even get me started >.>
this is more like a story than a poem..
are u trying to say u will lose your freedom the moment you step inside home?

Fate or destiny... what is it that binds us?!?! the blood...

Sounds like a poem about marriage... lol

Or life itself...

In my mind, it's the circle that "is"... the one we can imagine and ponder, yet have trouble describing in a few sentences. Nice poem!

Interesting poem, it does seem more like a story, but due to it's quick simple descriptions, I think it can bypass for a poem. But personally, I don't agree with the message. Blood lines never bounded me to anything that I couldn't easily walk away from, without any ill side effects.

It's Bloody Interesting

Well, this poem is about freedom.. I compared the freedom-ness to a bird and how one family, as i put it as blood in my poem, tied their youngest to everything. Like always, the youngest in a family always being blamed for everything...

WOAH o.o this is your first time and yet this is one of the best poems I heard... keep up the good work ^_^

this is very good. i take it you feel trapped and want to be free. been there.

over all its great i would check the grammer again but like i said its good very good!

keep it up

ooo nice poem. sounds like a poem about home. how ur tied to ur family and you just cant leave them no matter how much you want the freedom. but then even if you leave, you kno u can come back again. so take a step toward freedom and fly, just remember ur families and friends are there for you and you can always return and theyre waiting. =P just dun get lost in the process.