I'm back with a new poem XP hope you like it

In the unseen color of skin
I can be the unthinkable
...the unreasonable,
a deserted rose with wings.

And dance to the rhythm
of the warm rays
from your caribbean days
colored by its glowing play.

I can taste
the written kiss
you left on my lips
from the depths of your will.

But I can also be
the angelic devil
of your misfortunate pains
ripping them open again.

I can't get the meaning of most of the poem and u show ur evil twin too little..it's only the last part..try expanding it and reduce those 'happy' stuff

This poem sounds too happy to my ears! ^__^ Where's the EVIL TWIN? Don't get me wrong, it's a really nice poem... But I was expecting it to be darker and gloomier.

*rabid hugging Milkiyo* ^__^

ok huh my evil twin? i dont get it this is great but way too happy for it's title and is that all there is of ur evil twin? my evil twin wants to see me hung up by my entrails *but thats just mine*^___^

this sounds more like a riddle! eek gads... i got it... i think you've just explained every female out there ~ unreasonable.... good job ^_~

Huh, if this is your evil twin, the first 3 stanzas, I would love to hear from her. Tell her I said hi, and ask her if she'll

dance the moonlight
to the rhythmic wet waves
that spew their life
as white hazy rays.............J/K. XP<---------That is where my written kiss is, a very nauthy one at that.

Quote by jasaiyajinthis sounds more like a riddle! eek gads... i got it... i think you've just explained every female out there ~ unreasonable.... good job ^_~

Well, he hit the nail right on the head with his post and I agree wholey and completely with everyhting that he has said.

Though there wasn't much meter involved inn this poem, or at least i couldn't read (interpret) it (the meter) very clearly. Which made it lose a large portion of the poetic feel that a large number of your poems possess.

Not only did you explain every female out there, you even got what every woman probably dreams of. A vacation in the caribean that just so happens to have romance. e gads girl, that's what this is. a cry for a carribean vacation. *wink wink* talk about expensive. ^_~

Well, anyways, good job.

i think its pretty evil...it explains her evilness in a gentle way...if i'm not mistakin...
great one, thanx for sharin!

I like that you all made your own concept about the poem. I may admit you all guessed right, although I used a word in the poem that made you think the evil girl was only at the ending and is the word "but". This I made to tease you guys again as I always do Wether my evil twin's there or not, I want to know what you all think of the descriptive way I made my poem. Is it good? Does the way of writting it sounds unpoetic?

ps This poem is not only about good and evil, is about love, the summer love one meets on a vacation. Peace and love to you all and no I wasn't smoking when I wrote this XP

[I don't actually smoke]

when u say i are writing form ur evil twin's point of view....u sound like the evil twin is lonely and will haunt u when she is bored...