poem: deep waters

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tecnophreak

tecnophreak

retired user

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im so tired...theres no release when your older, always something to worry about...

"tattered"© tecnophreak and aliases 2005

rip all of this emotion away
to much to think of, and to say
let apathy in this place stay
this tattered shirt makes everyting ok

see the dark waters overlooking the bay
nothing left here in my way
painting a picture for you today
how i feel in what i say

chorus
im tired of all this pain
someone, somebody take it away
became numb again today
sleepy, so sleepy, again today
push it away, play it away

the deep blue water pulls me away
they ripple, and move seeming to say
maybe this isnt the place to stay
maybe nothing's ok, nothings ok

standing on the rock, over the bay
nothing left is in my way
painted a picture for you today
a tattered shirt, floating in the bay

chorus
im tired of all this pain
someone, somebody take it away
became numb again today
sleepy, so sleepy, again today
push it away, play it away

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  • Jun 20, 2005

SilentMasamune

SilentMasamune

I'm all washed up. . .

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The poem is quite good. It's an expression for some sadness and hurting as you have said. Keep it up. ;)

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  • Jun 20, 2005
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ah, you feel bad, you feel bad. No one can cure that..
once you feel bad its hard to turn back...

OracleAngel

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And from the dark waters comes in your arms
A shadowed figure of death and mourning, wading with you.
No heart or sould to take...Thy emotion still there!
Going, going, going gone....
at least theres hope.

Nice poem.

Midori-chan

Midori-chan

Shh...

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the poem is good. the expressions are well-shown..sadness and pain...

  • Jun 22, 2005
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Excellent use of emotion, seems like it could be or maybe should be a song it has a nice feel to it and I like very much.

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