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Poem: messed up "love"

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nimiru

nimiru

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and here i go again wid another poem i made a long back!! dat is if you ever read my other poems i posted b4!


messed up "love"


hello? hello!
i don't even know why you don't notice me
it seems you don't even care
like am the wind that blows pass you
as you stroll away

it looks like every time our eyes meet
you just suddenly look away
you stare at the ground, at your feet
feeling that you shouldn't be here at all

how about me?
do you ever think on how i should feel?
do you even try your best to make me feel better?
i don't know what's the matter with you
it's like we don't know each other at all
like two completely total strangers
simply knowing each other's names

so i ask you these questions:

are you pulling yourself together?
are you ripping yourself apart?
did you even read my letter?
all the remnants of my heart?

have you ever ask how i'm doing?
have you ever even try?
did you ever see me smile?
did you ever see me cry?

don't you think it's sad
that you use to be so sweet
at times even smile
never trying to flee?

don't you think it's mean
that you never say "i love you"
or even try to say it
leaving me so broken hearted?

why i ask you why?
why do you make me feel so confused?
how come you don't even try to say what's on your mind?
you know it shouldn't be this way

maybe i should leave
leave you and all my mixed up feelings
my emotions are dried up
my heart is forever shattered

you know what?
i've realized we're not meant to be
good bye to our love
and farewell to thee . . .

heh heh hope you like it!

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UmazakiFury

UmazakiFury

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WOW I've given you 10 out of 10 for that. NIce job!

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Smooth!

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Light and Darkness..they rely on each other..

That was pretty good. I could never write stuff like that. Wish I could though.

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-Heard it somewhere

moonbaby

moonbaby

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Wow amazing..... very impressive :d
i give a 9/10 cuz there always room for improvement ;)

Loves Ya!!! Great Job!!!!

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Aw. That's just lovelyed me to tears ;__;

I don't think you should have thrown on the 'thee' though - doesn't suit the rest of the poem. <3 But I like it heaps! `reat job ^__^

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I can relate closely to your poem. I really identified with the subject and the line " i've realized we're not meant to be good bye to our love and farewell to thee . . ." hits the spot !
Been there a couple of times...... have learnt from my mistakes and wont let myself go there again !
Great poem

Spidey-Matt

Spidey-Matt

Shira (Spidey-Matts Chicken)

This is really good and yet so sad. Very nice, keep it up ^^ -Shira

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midorinokari

midorinokari

Till My Forever Become No Longer

Hmmm, not to boast about it, but being the literary editor in our school paper, I have to say your style is pretty good! If you let me say it, I think you're pretty comfortale with your style... I like how you ended the poem, really cool and really impressive, but yeah, I have to agree with studio, I don't think thee fits the rest of the poem, but it's ok... Just thinkin out loud! Hai! Over and Out!

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nimiru

nimiru

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hey 'thee' just rhymes with 'be' right?

just couldn't say 'good bye to you!' that just sounds weird to end the poem.

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Ganjamus

Ganjamus

Insanity's Asylum

This is too... too hard to describe ^_^' I just can't think of a word for "I love it I love it I love it" >.<

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Melodyfpf

Melodyfpf

Murderous princess..

100/100! XD goooooooooooooooooood! JOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOBBBBBBBBBBB! XD

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Lionhearted911

Lionhearted911

~:. LioNe$s .:~

^i agree
sounds like an arguement for some reason..
very nice ^^ i actually feel sorry for them :P ^^

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