~Poem~ As I sleep...

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SakuraMonsumi

SakuraMonsumi

Aishiteru~~!!

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My second poem everyone!Urmm...I'm embarassed again..ur..here...u.u

As I sleep,
I dream of that special place,
Where you and me could nourish in the dense sunlight.
Where golden sands,
That bury sweet stories,
Please sing one to me?
A moonlit kiss will,
Awaken me..
A sweet breeze that blows like,
A mothers comfort...

As I sleep,
I dream that your hear beside me,
Eating sweets and chocolate tea,
Feeling such a sweet sensation,
Please come my way?
A deep thought will,
Enlighten me..
You hold my hand,
And I feel astray...

As I sleep,
I wonder if you could ever leave me,
And the thought seems so odd...

If you aren't remembered, then you never existed.

xluminax

xluminax

Honto ni? Sou ka...

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Good Poem.
Very Romantic.
And sweet.
Lol.
Well, sayonarra.

-Lumina

  • Oct 23, 2005

dalidadod

dalidadod

..:nya:..

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:o waw thats really so sweet from u to write that.. XP like this peom too....thanx for sharin and dunt be embarassed ;) keep it up sweety *hugs* OX

BorN2BurN

BorN2BurN

Tiller Di Till

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romantic......hmmm....*dream* very good poem !!!
Make more !!!

BorN2BurN

Only together we have a chance.
So let us live together and fight together.
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  • Oct 24, 2005
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This is realli a sweet poem
Hope u could write more abt this kind of poem

  • Oct 24, 2005

leosama84

leosama84

::Peace Maker::

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its nice...not bad...
but mayb ur missing some vocabulary, and some words are misplaces ;)
don't hate me, just trying to help ya :D
bai bai! happy ramadan!
Leo

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greatdragon

Mr. Doom

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not bad, could be better

There's No place like hell

  • Oct 26, 2005

ultimate540

ultimate540

Innocence Fleeting

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"As I sleep,
I wonder if you could ever leave me,
And the thought seems so odd..."

The last line of the poem is wonderful. It sums things up with such innocence and caring...The poem is good, but the last line is what makes it great.

  • Oct 27, 2005

geninlv1

geninlv1

untamed

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pretty dreamy poem you got there! I always like this kinda stuff anyways.

  • Oct 27, 2005

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