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griffin

griffin

Super Natty

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We conjure up demons of foul smelling vapor
And caught in their wake they engulf and devour me

The smell of your hair is the moon over water
This night I dreamt of gouging my eyes

  • Nov 14, 2005
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erm...it a pretty short poem man!
I think I understand the meaning of it but it's too short to really portray and show out the feeling..
thanks for sharing anyway^^

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Sierra04

Sierra04

My heart belongs to him..Erik...

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yup kinda short...teehee...but thanks for sharing it...^^

  • Nov 20, 2005

jasaiyajin

jasaiyajin

-repeat-

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GOD OF WISDOM, PRAY TO SLEEP, THIS POETIC PASSPHRASE, TO THE DEEP

-repeat-

  • Nov 20, 2005

griffin

griffin

Super Natty

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Well you guys must feel really ripped off when you read a Haiku...

Thanks for commenting

  • Nov 21, 2005

BlkLotus

BlkLotus

bara tsukiyo

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well i may not understand it but for a haiku it is good. very nice indeed!

griffin

griffin

Super Natty

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Sorry, my bad

I didn't mean that this poem was a haiku. A haiku is actually shorter than my poem.

  • Nov 21, 2005

j0n0

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Increadibly Cute

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looks like two haikus, and i can't find any relationship between the two. The second haiku, I don't see how the two lines relate. And why did you explain a smell characteristic with an image characteristic: The "smell" of your hair is the "moon over water" ? I don't know if the metaphore works.

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  • Nov 22, 2005

supo

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Geisha=Artist

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I didmnt know if that was a poem or a comment.
on the poem. but it was cool SHORT but cool.

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