We conjure up demons of foul smelling vapor
And caught in their wake they engulf and devour me
The smell of your hair is the moon over water
This night I dreamt of gouging my eyes
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- Nov 14, 2005
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erm...it a pretty short poem man!
I think I understand the meaning of it but it's too short to really portray and show out the feeling..
thanks for sharing anyway^^
My Newest Submission:Curse Of The Prosperity God- Nov 20, 2005
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yup kinda short...teehee...but thanks for sharing it...^^
- Nov 20, 2005
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GOD OF WISDOM, PRAY TO SLEEP, THIS POETIC PASSPHRASE, TO THE DEEP
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- Nov 20, 2005
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Well you guys must feel really ripped off when you read a Haiku...
Thanks for commenting
- Nov 21, 2005
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well i may not understand it but for a haiku it is good. very nice indeed!
- Nov 21, 2005
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Sorry, my bad
I didn't mean that this poem was a haiku. A haiku is actually shorter than my poem.
- Nov 21, 2005
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looks like two haikus, and i can't find any relationship between the two. The second haiku, I don't see how the two lines relate. And why did you explain a smell characteristic with an image characteristic: The "smell" of your hair is the "moon over water" ? I don't know if the metaphore works.
An eye for an eye brings justice, but it is compassion that changes a man.
Another point of view doesn't necessarily make yours more or less right.
- Nov 22, 2005
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I didmnt know if that was a poem or a comment.
on the poem. but it was cool SHORT but cool.
- Dec 20, 2005
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