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(poem) November Wind

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anima241

anima241

Holdin onto the past!

i have't submitted anything in a very long time, so here's my latest poem, November wind

Colors fade
Along with their shades
My piano plays loudly
As my heart rushes wildly

the gray season
its is the main reason
why i play my piano alone
because of my gray tone

I live with purpose, yes i do
to come back in spring and turn the sky blue
to paint the oceans with my art
i truly hope i dont smell a fart

november wind is blowing, taking the colors away
but i will take them back, someday
i will destroy it with a single ray
a single ray that is, a true day

november wind is blowing with the smell of snow
what is decmber bringing? i do not know

(its quaint and mellow, i hoped you guys liked it comment if you want)

fading away isn't an option.

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BlkLotus

BlkLotus

bara tsukiyo

quaint yes its cute the fart part threw me off a bit but its good
it has a rhythm to it decent pace to read it i think nice job

eveningsky

eveningsky

Blue Blooded Warrior

i agree with BilkLotus on the fart part......
how about: i truly hope i dont fall apart?
that seems to fit more...

merged: 11-23-2006 ~ 11:04am
Oh, though i love the rest, especially the piano parts. i love this one!

I feel the tears pour down my face. I feel so alone, so out of place.
Is it always going to end this way?
When you can feel pain, you know that your alive. But what doesn't kill you, makes you stronger.

I agree with the above although it does make the whole poem funnier, lol. Then again, that's probably not what you were going for...but yes, pretty nonetheless.

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