[POEM]Does it hurt?

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Today I was struck with another inspiration and another will to write a poem after I read one of lilwolfmaiden-san's violent, gory poems.... ( Untitled poem #3 to be exact)
It took me quite a while to write this poem.....
And sorry if it's quite..... psychotic..... Don't hesitate to criticize please....
Don't get offended easily... unless you hit me hard


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Nobody told her where she was
She just awoke from her slumber and as she noticed the twilight breeze of the celestial sky
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The crimson reflection on the murky black heaven above
As the cloud billowed a million dust under her feet.....
She noticed the air was painted with a different shadow
It was something wet and had an unpleasant stench of decayed fruit
Polluted with scarlet paint.....

As she released a million despair in the quiet solitude....
She saw far away.... Somewhere beyond that boundary of the skyline.....
Someone....

There.... in the calming silence
She approached.... Closer and closer as her footstep tolls
Echoing through and through cursing her ears
As her final footstep laid.....
There....
A mask without emotion yet of inhumane expression.... Overflowing with pain and misery
As if begging for soothing voice gone a million mile
Legs and arms torn apart and blood vessels blooming like vines of thorn
It was no longer a human.....
But a broken sprinkler spraying scarlet paint

She approached it again....
One step closer....

"Who are you?....."
"Does it hurt?..... It's okay.... You can tell me"
"It hurts even more if you keep your pain a secret"
".....Why won't you talk to me?"
An eternal mute
"Do you want to be loved?"
"I'm sorry that nobody was kind enough to love you"
"Sorry that nobody was brave enough to say sorry to you"

Then she touched the scarlet red paint on the ground
Her fingers embracing her lips slowly and gently
...... A tender smile on her face
"You know.... this is the first time I've ever put on lipstick"

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Lionhearted911

Lionhearted911

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hahaha a rather cute poem...i love the dialogue and a witty ending...lipstick eh..
keep it up!

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  • Mar 12, 2007
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Another good poem by vatican92........ Keep up the good work!

  • Mar 12, 2007
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i like it. the words u used were undescribely realistic. i loved it. it's sounds so soft and fuzzy. umm maybe i should used "warm and gentle"? it's something i would love to draw...haha u must be a healer of some sort for other people. how nice ^-^. ur heart must be really pure. i hope it doesn't get tainted in the future. (am i speaking jibberish? if i am just ignore this).

love the ending XD

"I must destroy the despair-night
To shine in Eternity's sunshine."

  • Apr 20, 2007

exal

exal

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exellent! :)

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It's awesome. You described the imagery very well.

  • May 25, 2007

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