Reason I'm posting here as this is my 3rd ever vector and first time I've been using the pen tool in a vector and need some serious critique before I enter the final phase for touch ups and filling out areas (especially so around Hinata as there are gaps). If you see something obvious that needs to be fixed, odds are I already know about it. I need feedback on the less obvious things to improve the vector. Entity1660 has been my assist on this, but would like another party's opinion at its 80% completion stage.
Some notes to keep in mind
1) I will not be vectoring the whole source; just Hinata and Naruto.
2) I plan on using this vector in a wallpaper I have planned.
3) The planned wallpaper I have in mind is also going to use lyrics I wrote myself, but I would like a Japanese interpretation of them written up. If anyone can direct me to someone who can do this for me, much appreciated.
4) The scene I pulled this from is in black and white, hence the lack of color here (see source image above).
Thanks for the critique! I'm hoping to learn more.